I can't explain

I can't explain

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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Random thoughts written out.

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I...I can't explain
Why there are the lame
Why tumors develope on the brain
Why the sky is never plain

I...I can't explain
Why quantum physics are not possible
Why a tree can become hollow
Why the stars are so far away

I...I can't explain
Why cancer is so deadly
Why my head is full of fantasy
Why time never stops
Why innocent men run from the cops

I...I can't explain
Why love is so strange
Why sex cures distress
Why a wife can get so depressed

I...I can't explain
Why I love you
Why I feel this way
Why I can't relate

I...I can't explain
Why this poem is written this way
Why I will post this anyway.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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Daniel Gardner
Random thought but still rate,review,comment.

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I like this poem, though I couldn't get warm to the last stanza. I think inside you is a more powerful way to end this. Good write! I felt the helplessness and confusion and pain. Well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Coming to terms with the uncertainties of life is an art….
There are many things….
That ….cant be explained…
Living with them in harmony….is the real art of living…
Your other writings assures that you can….discover this art….be optimistic…


Posted 14 Years Ago


Fun reading.
Interesting thoughts and well written with a nice flow!


Posted 14 Years Ago


funny ending =D

Posted 14 Years Ago


Random thought can be best! Good flow xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


I love the ending on this one.
This is a wonderful write here

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the fact that you're willing to experiment a bit (the I...I can't at the onset of each stanza). It does seem a bit overdone at first, but why not? Changing to another format late in the poem would probably disrupt your effort. I like the flow of the message until the last stanza... I think the poem has too much depth to end it in the superficial way you do - a more profound closing thought would really lift the poem up to another level. Check the spelling of develop early in the poem. In the second stanza, I wonder whether physics is not usually treated as a singular noun thereby taking a singular verb (is rather than are). Nice job on this one.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Dang it, it seems people always beat me to the punch, so I'm just gonna say I agree with the two reviews below me and that I loved your poem. You seriously have talent dude.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very nice. And as writers that is our advantage, to be able to pour our feelings onto the page, to be able top release some of the pain. Nicely written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Digging the ending, like you're trying to say how much you don't want people to see this by lumping it in with all these other bad things, and it's a creative way of doing so. Maybe don't have the stutter on every single stanza though, it makes it a little awkward after a while, but I dig what you're trying to do. Kudos man!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Daniel Gardner
Daniel Gardner

Monroe, GA



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