Danger

You are truly in danger
Satan wants your soul
Not your spirit
Your Soul!!!

He will slither up to you
Telling you cunning lies
He destroys your spirit

You will never be the same
He will rip and tear it away
Tear you down

Once your spirit is crushed
Then he takes your life
Your soul
Your breath
Blood
Even your heart

If you let him
If you kneel before him
You proved him right
For that you die

Author's Note

Review, Comment, Rate!! I was starting to get real annoyed at everyone saying it needs more imagery. I wrote it how I wanted people to see it. There's a message in it and the message is not imagery.

Reviews

[Eric Cox]

Great poem, it has a very intelligent message. Very nicely done.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought it was good. I loved this very much. Thanks for sharing.

[Becca*Type2012]

Nice poem. Tons and tons of imagry in this poem, espically the third stanza. Nice work.

[James Watts]

This is nice but I agree on the imagery. I can not comment too much on poetry, as I do not write it , but I can tell you that I enjoyed reading it.

[JenLyn]

It's a good idea but I would like to see more imagery in the poem. I'm not a great writer but if you would like some pointers feel free to message me and I'll help you as much as I can. Also if you're looking at getting better at poetry you may want to scan the pages of Amazon and get a book on poetry. I took a poetry class in college and it helped me so much. The poem did flow well and the rhyme wasn't forced but there was something missing. Keep writing!!! :) Practice makes perfect!

[Daydreamer54]

way to go, to let pppl know about satan. He truley is out to steal, kill, and destroy.

[LalaDia]

Like Bette said, more visuals please =]. Real great idea though.

[Bette]

this is great, but i would like to see more visuals in it. i LIKE the concept, but i would LOVE to be able to "touch" it.

[deeps]

This is truly awesome here.
I like this write alot.

[Frantzuu]

Great piece, very well expressed. :D