A scared boy tries to cope when his mother is raped and killed in front of him and is later on bullied on his looks, a number of years later he extracts his revenge in gruesome ways.
Dane,
If broken up into conventional paragraph format this prologue would be much more readable. I stopped in the first sentence when I came to the unattributed quote. This may be a fine story but there are few story writers and readers in WC. I suggest you not miss a chance to engage them immediately and early in your fiction.