Sound of Darkness

Sound of Darkness

A Poem by Laura Elizabeth Brown

Sound of Silence
"I don't live in darkness, Darkness lives in me"
There seems to be no light
Shining through my eyes
The only thing coming out of my brown eyes are tiny,blue drops of tears.
Some days I want to cry but it feels like nothing comes out.
There's even days where I feel like locking myself in a soundproof room and
screaming at the top of my lungs to release the demons that
are hiding inside of me.

© 2016 Laura Elizabeth Brown


Author's Note

Laura Elizabeth Brown
this is my first poem being submitted so no negative comments. But please leave postive comments on what you think. even give me some feedback on how to make it better.

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For a first poem, you have a good start here and the subject matter is effective. This feels like it was written from deep within, using raw emotion and personal expression. Many of us have fallen into an abyss we thought we'd never escape from and that makes this write all the more easier to relate to. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laura Elizabeth Brown

7 Years Ago

thank you for the good feedback.
Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)

7 Years Ago

You are welcome!



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For a first poem, you have a good start here and the subject matter is effective. This feels like it was written from deep within, using raw emotion and personal expression. Many of us have fallen into an abyss we thought we'd never escape from and that makes this write all the more easier to relate to. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laura Elizabeth Brown

7 Years Ago

thank you for the good feedback.
Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)

7 Years Ago

You are welcome!
Firstly, Black Wolf is an encouraging writer on here. There are some minor grammar mistakes that the writer's group will be able to help you with especially the mediator. Frankly, I am an experienced writer, but I am awful with it as well.

Sounds of Darkness appears to be an epiphany; a writer finally opening their eyes after being born. We tend to hide in our own thoughts especially since they cannot be seen unless you want them to. Releasing emotion and thought allows us to flush out toxicities; it brings us balance.

Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Laura Elizabeth Brown

7 Years Ago

that would be nice. i do need help with grammar work and also punctuation. before i started the writ.. read more
The honesty and simplicity makes for a powerful write here Laura Elizabeth Brown

Interestingly - The technique (of shouting in a room to expel 'stuff') is a real thing - called 'Primal Screaming' and gave rise to a top song here in the UK called 'Shout' by Tears for Fears.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Small grammar mistakes but all in all not bad. I take this is a free verse style as there seems to be no rhyming.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wølfy

7 Years Ago

It is okay. We all have to start somewhere. just keep practicing. :)
Laura Elizabeth Brown

7 Years Ago

yes i am currently going to college right now so it gives me lots of practice since next semester im.. read more
Wølfy

7 Years Ago

That is always good.

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Added on November 16, 2016
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Laura Elizabeth Brown
Laura Elizabeth Brown

wilkes barre, PA



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I'm 22, a student at Luzerne County Community College,in which im going for my associates degree in science. im studying to be a medical office assistant(specialist). I just recently got into writing .. more..

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