if you made it a little bit longer that would be a lovely ballad :) (the refrain: my lover, my protector, my angel fits perfectly with the title and the whole poem), no rhymes but they were not needed, the poem follows a nice metrica and has a great flow, just the only thing (which is not wrong, it's just a choise) you played it too much like a "photo album", let me explain it: every two verses (except for the refrain where every single verse) make us think of a specific image ... but you didn't stop enough time to let us see any photo in particular ! (next time don't be afraid of "getting inside the story" by giving more details)
if you made it a little bit longer that would be a lovely ballad :) (the refrain: my lover, my protector, my angel fits perfectly with the title and the whole poem), no rhymes but they were not needed, the poem follows a nice metrica and has a great flow, just the only thing (which is not wrong, it's just a choise) you played it too much like a "photo album", let me explain it: every two verses (except for the refrain where every single verse) make us think of a specific image ... but you didn't stop enough time to let us see any photo in particular ! (next time don't be afraid of "getting inside the story" by giving more details)
Awww, i missed your work!! Hmm, quite a short piece my dear.. but i love it!! Angels are always there to guide us even when we feel so alone. When no one is listening... we can simply whisper our desires.. our prayers.. hoping an angel will hear. Also, they ease our pain.. our sadness too.. if nothing else goes right.
Lovely write and it made me feel in peace.
It's a good start. The one thing I notice is that you might wanna mess with your line breaks and your ending punctuation. I think it would flow better if there were pauses after certain lines but there isn't always anything to guide the flow when I'm reading and give it rhythm.
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