if you made it a little bit longer that would be a lovely ballad :) (the refrain: my lover, my protector, my angel fits perfectly with the title and the whole poem), no rhymes but they were not needed, the poem follows a nice metrica and has a great flow, just the only thing (which is not wrong, it's just a choise) you played it too much like a "photo album", let me explain it: every two verses (except for the refrain where every single verse) make us think of a specific image ... but you didn't stop enough time to let us see any photo in particular ! (next time don't be afraid of "getting inside the story" by giving more details)
So short but so... powerful. We all need that one person who will help us through hell. Our Guardian angels, so to speak. They listen to our woes, they hold out their hands when we fall, they raise us up when we feel down. They're almost superhuman to us. J'adore! -Ian
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