Dancing In The Rain

A couple that loves to dance in the rain...

A couple we are

That is in love

Holds hands

As you lead me outside

You grab my hand

And spin me around

Whispering in my ear

You have something

Important to tell me

I look at you worried

But your warm smile

Washes that feeling away

You grab both my hands

And tell me

Everything's gonna be okay

I look up at you

As a raindrop hits your nose

You get down on one knee

My heart skips a beat,

The rhythm of the rain picks up

Just like the beat of my heart;

Could it be?

Will I finally get my chance?

You look at me through the rain

And say...

"Baby I love you and you're the best thing I've ever had..."

"Will you marry me?"

"Yes,yes"   I say helping him stand up

He takes my hand

And we spin around and dance

As the rain hits us harder

And I could care less

If I catch a cold

Because I'm with my one true love...

And that's all that matters

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

You bring a fairy tale of dreams with this, and that true love sort of dreamy feeling that many dream about wanting, having. This is really nice, you express the imagery nicely carried out through out the write. The love within it shows as well; as a nice story in a poem. Good write, enjoyed a lot.

[realmwriter]

Very well done. I too would like to know more about the characters but that cane be told in another poem. It's kinda free verse kinda prose poem as well... Again Very Well done...!

[tekphobik]

Good job on painting a narrative tale, though I feel as though I'd like to know more about the characters. I mean, I'm sure there's a large percentage of people who instantly identify with the idea of marriage being some dream to achieve, but there's another portion that I fall into which needs to understand the need and desire for such a commitment. I feel as though you've captured the moment without the soul, as a picture would, instead of being able to capture it properly in a story. But that's just me and I'm evil, embittered, jaded and blah blah.