Dancing In The Rain

A couple that loves to dance in the rain...

A couple we are

That is in love

Holds hands

As you lead me outside

You grab my hand

And spin me around

Whispering in my ear

You have something

Important to tell me

I look at you worried

But your warm smile

Washes that feeling away

You grab both my hands

And tell me

Everything's gonna be okay

I look up at you

As a raindrop hits your nose

You get down on one knee

My heart skips a beat,

The rhythm of the rain picks up

Just like the beat of my heart;

Could it be?

Will I finally get my chance?

You look at me through the rain

And say...

"Baby I love you and you're the best thing I've ever had..."

"Will you marry me?"

"Yes,yes"   I say helping him stand up

He takes my hand

And we spin around and dance

As the rain hits us harder

And I could care less

If I catch a cold

Because I'm with my one true love...

And that's all that matters

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

You bring a fairy tale of dreams with this, and that true love sort of dreamy feeling that many dream about wanting, having. This is really nice, you express the imagery nicely carried out through out the write. The love within it shows as well; as a nice story in a poem. Good write, enjoyed a lot.

[Leslie Philibert]

I`m always impressed how young people can write so well.Good poem. Did you want`t to write... And I coudn`t care less If I catch a cold?.Well done.

[Lily Mae]

Whether rain is the metaphor or you really are dancing in the rain...it's all beautiful.. We fail to often in relationships in life because we forget to play we forget to dance in the rain.. Excellent write T~ xo

[Brandi Espy]

Really sweet. Nice job; good writing.

[Blake]

The poem switches between calling the male "you" and to "him." Stay with one of these throughout the poem ;) Other than that, which was the only grammatical error I found, this was a very great poem with a clear emotional, beautiful meaning. Great job!

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Aw this is sooo cute and beautiful, I love it soo much! Wonderfully done, wonderful!

[Groovy]

lovely poem

[Aidz]

Mm I think its good :)

[Kim]

This is amazing, so beuatiful. Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem. To dance in the rain and know happiness is a good day. Thank you for the positive poem of love. A outstanding poem.
Coyote