Dancing In The Rain

A couple that loves to dance in the rain...

A couple we are

That is in love

Holds hands

As you lead me outside

You grab my hand

And spin me around

Whispering in my ear

You have something

Important to tell me

I look at you worried

But your warm smile

Washes that feeling away

You grab both my hands

And tell me

Everything's gonna be okay

I look up at you

As a raindrop hits your nose

You get down on one knee

My heart skips a beat,

The rhythm of the rain picks up

Just like the beat of my heart;

Could it be?

Will I finally get my chance?

You look at me through the rain

And say...

"Baby I love you and you're the best thing I've ever had..."

"Will you marry me?"

"Yes,yes"   I say helping him stand up

He takes my hand

And we spin around and dance

As the rain hits us harder

And I could care less

If I catch a cold

Because I'm with my one true love...

And that's all that matters

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

You bring a fairy tale of dreams with this, and that true love sort of dreamy feeling that many dream about wanting, having. This is really nice, you express the imagery nicely carried out through out the write. The love within it shows as well; as a nice story in a poem. Good write, enjoyed a lot.

[Matty Bosox]

This is excellent!!! A very happy poem...I love the mention of the rain...It reminds me of a great Bob Marley quote "Some people just stand in the rain and enjoy the moment, those who run from it only get wet" Excellent poem though...Good job Tasha

[amdc101]

But your warm smile
Washes that feeling away

This was my favorite part :)

[Chantel]

I think this is one of my favorites by you! I loved the rhythm and of course the cute story :) Great job!

[closed..acct]

Wow deep and so emotive,
I can feel the feelings through out this piece.
So wonderfully written

[Fairytale]

I love the subject you chose! I like poems that contain stories. I got an exhilirated feeling from the last paragraph.

[Casey Dusek]

It's a well written narrative poem. Just a consideration, this piece could easily be turned into a well written narrative story. I'd enjoy connecting with the characters. I think it would better express their love and help me (the reader) connect with them on my own level.

[Kim's Poems]

So very nicely done, I really enjoyed this piece.

[katyj]

This is wonderful, quite lovely

[Rapper VenQ]

Lovely rain...nice job