You Told Me

A comparison unlike no other.

You told me

You were unlike the rest,

It seemed like you were

A new flavor  of candy

From the outside covering

All shiny and perfect,

But then I tasted you...

And once I tasted you 

You turned out to be 

The knock-off version

A complete opposite

Of the original

And who I thought you were 

You're mean

Heartbreaking,

And someone I don't 

Want to be around

But there's something 

In this candy

That keeps bringing me back...

Is it your smile?

Your laugh?

Your charm?

You're sweet when you want to be

And sour the next,

You told me you were different

But it looks like I'm back 

Where I started...

Looking for that one special

Piece of candy...

Author's Note

I know this is rough, I haven't written in a while because of school, but please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Liza]

perhaps it's a toxic additive added to the candy that triggers the addiction...sugar can be rush but we also crash - hence the artificial sweetners - good comparison to reflect on. do we want pure sugar, the artificial sweetners or honey that we can digest and that is truly natural.

[Canicus]

I liked it.

"It seemed like you were
A new flavor of candy
From the outside covering
All shiny and perfect"

that was a really good way to start out a poem, and then the next line drew me in, then I had to read more. Excellent

[KAREN]

Nicely done! I love the way you use candy to describe this person! Nice show of emotions.

[dreaming dame]

:) Nice love the word choice.

[IceDragonOfPluto]

very inventive way to talk about the upsets and let-downs of love.

[nishantshah2381]

decent expressions....defintely a good write .......

[Jaded rose]

I think it is good...just know that there will be a lot of candy that will be like that in your life. Thank you for the inspiration.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like it. You expected the brand name taste and got the el cheapo version eh? lol That "eye candy" never is as sweet as advertised. ;o)

[joshua deathdealer]

I love it..."A new flavor of candy"!! Nice work..xx