Packaged Away

Packaged Away

A Poem by Tasha
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Pushed aside and not being able to express yourself.

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Packed together closely,
No room to breathe
No way for me to become my own
Thrown in with the rest
Together we are packed away,
With no room left to let
Our personalities shine through
Squeezed together to get as much
In as we can
Packed away with no sense of
Identity,
No purpose,
Stacked in a storage closet
Locked away from the world

© 2011 Tasha


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So often, it seems that we are packed away in a closet or lost in throgs of people. Suddenly, sometimes, a word, gesture, or a smile will come back to greet us; then, we know that we are very much alive. I loved your poem and I loved your thoughts. You are not "locked away from the world," because you are very much a part of it, adding all that you can to the beauty of it. This was a very well written and clearly understandable piece of writing; well executed and strong!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.



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Deep and fascinating. You have encompased so many ideas and themes into such a short physical place. Terrific

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This just hits the heart, I really enjoyed this write.
Such a wonderful write, I can feel the emotions.


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awesome sense of what some may want us to be.....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very mysterious poem to me.
Well great pressure over time
creates a diamond. Perhaps this
will happen in your case.
Oh, I forgot you're already a diamond
Ta'Shandra. Lovely poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hits a cord. A very good read!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tremendously sacred in my opinion. A beautiful read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I feel the line "Packed in a storage closet" locks the dramatic effect the rest of this poem has. I would say something more like "suffocating in a dark room". Just my opinion. However, the idea behind this poem is wonderful. Keep revising, there is always room for improvement. This is a poem that deserves to be the best it can be.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Feelings that most people feel at one time or another, great write :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Love this. Too true, for me.
Great write! :)

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