Watching My Prey

Obsession and wanting revenge.

Getting ready

Looking my best

Tonight I will put you to the test

The test of self control,

You won't even know its me

You can sense that someone is watching you

But you don't know who,

That's what it should feel like when I'm 

Watching my prey

Waiting for you to mess up

Waiting for you to make a mistake

A mistake that could damage

Everything we had

And worked hard for

I walk up to you in my light blue mask

I tap your shoulder

And give you a long passionate kiss,

The party stops

Not a word is said

I turn around to runaway

But halfway out the door someone catches my hand 

I smile to myself,

I spun  around so fast

I couldn't even see who it was

Whoever it was returned the passionate kiss

Making my heart skip a few beats

I had to do what I had to do,

I pulled my dagger from around my ankle

And I stabbed him,

I watched as my prey fell helplessly to the ground

I kissed his cheek as I watched him fall

Into a deep never ending sleep

Author's Note

Since I've been away for a while I thought I'd come back with a bang. I hope you like it. Sorry I went crazy with the colors.

Reviews

[Kestrova]

The colors really make each statement stand out and add flavor to an already fantastic piece. This had a good rhythm, even if it took me a moment to catch on to it. However, the flow is disrupted in the fifth stanza with the word 'spinned' when 'spun' would be the appropriate term. Other than that, it's a great poem! :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Stunning piece!! I love it! And I like the use of your colors actually. It makes the words stand out and give that attention. Hmm this is quite different I must say.. It was interesting though! Quite a unique perception.. hmm.. it made me feel a bit creepy but fascinated at the same time. lol.
LOVE this! Another wonderful work.. =D I enjoyed reading it!

[Linear]

Revenge is a dish best served cold, but not one I would endorse.
You told the story well and the colours added to highlight the emotions. Though perhaps one or two to many, never-the-less an excellent poem :0)

[Lindsey]

I liked it a lot. It was the perfect amount of creepy and interesting.

[Raven Starhawk]

I thought the colors were a excellent touch. I also am feeling this one. It is dark and not something I would read everyday. Well penned.

[Jibin]

That colors make a different sense for each words. An interesting write...
:)

[Dreamer]

I understand the use of the colours, light/dark blue and purple but forgive me, i dont quite understand the use of the others. This is definitely a Bang! I like this, its a very renaissance feel to it. A very surprising ending. I thought ur persona was going to "fall madly in love".

Is this a poem about revenge? Maybe a lover/boyfriend possibly hurt you. The mask could be symbolic of you changing from who u were takin on new characteristics. Or maybe it could jsu be a symbol if deception sincce much deception was used here. When he kissed you, did u almost fall for him again until u forced urself to stick to ur purpose, hurting him-killing him the way he most have killed you before.

This was a joy reading- just personally think some of the colours could be muted but thts just me. Great job

[Calypso]

Wow alpha-female! It's a different thing for you.

[Fire Tulip]

Very dark and mysterious, I love it!

[AndyJCash]

Oh snap! At first I thought "Wait I can see where this is going..." and then you flipped it. The colours do help settle the mood with each line. Well worked!

[?]

Excellent piece