Watching My Prey

Obsession and wanting revenge.

Getting ready

Looking my best

Tonight I will put you to the test

The test of self control,

You won't even know its me

You can sense that someone is watching you

But you don't know who,

That's what it should feel like when I'm 

Watching my prey

Waiting for you to mess up

Waiting for you to make a mistake

A mistake that could damage

Everything we had

And worked hard for

I walk up to you in my light blue mask

I tap your shoulder

And give you a long passionate kiss,

The party stops

Not a word is said

I turn around to runaway

But halfway out the door someone catches my hand 

I smile to myself,

I spun  around so fast

I couldn't even see who it was

Whoever it was returned the passionate kiss

Making my heart skip a few beats

I had to do what I had to do,

I pulled my dagger from around my ankle

And I stabbed him,

I watched as my prey fell helplessly to the ground

I kissed his cheek as I watched him fall

Into a deep never ending sleep

Author's Note

Since I've been away for a while I thought I'd come back with a bang. I hope you like it. Sorry I went crazy with the colors.

Reviews

[Kestrova]

The colors really make each statement stand out and add flavor to an already fantastic piece. This had a good rhythm, even if it took me a moment to catch on to it. However, the flow is disrupted in the fifth stanza with the word 'spinned' when 'spun' would be the appropriate term. Other than that, it's a great poem! :)

[Chantel]

Ahh I like it a lot, you did come back with a bang, excellent work :D

[Kelly]

good idea, just maybe try to do some showing instead of telling. I really like where you're going with this though.

[DRD]

wanted to give you 100 but my zero key didn't work lets try again.

[DRD]

Love the enthusiam and emotion you put into this, It says to me that you were betrayed, and in return you broke his heart.

[Jessica]

i really do like this.
i've re-read it over and over again.
well done (:

[Daytonight]

I like the use of the color! It is great. Keep on penning.

[light and ashes]

Great intense and compelling poem of a most deadly temptress.

[Jake Staffeld]

The colors make the most sensual statements stand out. This poem scared me a little, truth be told.

[Carrion.]

I love the colors. It just brings it out even more. I love the whole masquarde theme thingy.xD
good job:#

[Groovy]

excellent poem