I Think You're The One

A good note turned sour.

I think you're the one for me

Because you're unlike all the others,

You treat me like a star

I'm getting the royal treatment,

I think you're the one for me 

Because you make me feel special,

You make me feel beautiful

And worth something

You are the one for me

Because of your boyish charm

And adorable smile,

You had me wrapped around your finger!

I thought you were the one for me

But you led a double life,

You made me believe that who you said you were

As the real you.. But it wasn't,

You're just a crook in disguise

Trying to steal someone else's joy

I thought you were the one for me

But you turned out to be

Just like all the others 

Reviews

[Brad Nugent]

Unfortunately it does take time until we find the right relationship - that perfect fit. Some start well in our own minds, but end badly as you describe. Some never get off the ground because they are clearly not right! I hate admitting that I am a romantic optimist at heart - but I do believe that happiness and love are out there - sometimes in the least expected places. A nice write about love and the betrayal of love that hurts so much when it hits us. Well done.

[DRD]

This is the world in a hand-basket as I say We are one of two things A lot of little lies wrapped in one big truth, or smaller truths wrapped in one big lie. Your poem makes people think I glad for that because not enough people do that anymore.

[Mashairi]

This poem made me go "Exactly!" You just voice the negativity i feel for this one dude. Beautiful written, T :)

[jimmy]

very well written. unfortunately it describes all too well relationships today. a little dishearteningly, but that takes nothing away from its beauty.

[Silent Serenity also kn..]

Wow, beautifully done! It's sad that there are so many unreal souls out there that only want to diminish your heart & the way you feel! We all want that perfect love to only have it yanked away! This piece was outstanding! Keep up the amazing creations!

[TheCreativityItself]

This is such a great poem, for me only the first part counts... But when I'm single again, Haha then I'll understand the last part too.

Great writing!

[Daytonight]

I can so relate to this! I know exactly how this feels. Keep on penning.

[A poet's heart]

I love the way the tense changes throughout this piece! It shows a great progression of time :) thanks for sharing :) x

[Spookers]

"You treat me like a star
I'm getting the royal treatment,"
I feel like that is repeating itself. 'treat' and 'treatment'. I think you should change one of those so that the poem flows better. But the poem was great other wise.

[Day Dreamer]

Very emotional and powerful. And an eye opener to the cheaters in the world. Keep writing! :)

[sarah]

I have felt this before great write!