Room 8611

my thoughts on my aunt having her first child.

Room 8611,

The room where a new life began

The room where old grudges subsided

Where old things said are left in the past,

A place where everyone should come together

But you push us away,

You say that we don't know what we're talking about

You say you know what your doing,

But taking care of a baby is hard work

And listening to your friends is not helping

Room 8611,

The room where a new life begins

The room where new grudges grow

Room 8611,

Its not you its the people in the room...

Reviews

[blakjassy]

This is a very interesting insight into the coming together of a family... or at least that is what I get from it... So often happy family occasions such as Weddings, births, birthday gatherings... bring out the worst when in fact it should do the opposite!

[Linear]

Not wishing to cause offence, if the child is Loved then all will go well :0). Hard work and all

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work for sure.

[TheElfPrincess]

A beautiful, short piece of which the sentences were very strong and realistic. The repeating of "Room 8611" makes it a very important thing which is the heart of this poem. I like the sentence: "The room where new grudges grow" Well done. A beautiful piece.

[Brad Nugent]

A beautiful short piece that lacks nothing in intensity. I love the way the room becomes personified at the end of the poem. And the way the room turns from a symbol of hope to a symbol of being rejected in such a short space.

[Hello, Goodbye]

mighty strong brevity.. nice job..

[stars are far]

this is nice ..

[Chris]

You put together an insight...

Well done.
Chris

[Dreamer]

Hmmm interesting and creative since u took the number of a hospital room and produced this piece:)(i think) Liking your writing

[Calypso]

Sounds like a good room

[amdc101]

This is an interesting take on the experience.