Broken Petal

My take on he loves me he loves me not.

I love it when you call me beautiful,

But I hate it when you say I'm ugly

I love it when you hold my hand,

And hate it when you don't take me around your friends

I love it when you hold me close,

But hate it when you say you need space

I love you

And I hate you

I want to be with you,

But I feel like I'm selling myself short

Love should be a two way street

And if your not with me

I must be better off without you

So I count my petals

One by one

It says I love you not ...

Author's Note

This has nothing to do with me, I just wrote it. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

He loves me, he loves me not. This made me wonder more if the protagonist loved herself enough to cut the tie with someone who treated her so poorly. I'm glad she wises up at the end!

I could be way off base here, (I know you were playing with format here, and being creative,) but by having the last stanza in such small lettering and so compacted, it gives the illusion that her words lack real conviction. I think it would make more impact for her words to get stronger and bolder. Just MHO.

[Kiri Nells]

Internal conflict has always been a leader in the inspiration of poets and poetesses. It seems that no matter the age, that double personality of our hearts is there making us feel much more than we sometimes want. I enjoyed the simple poem with a not-so-simple nature. Great write :) Thank you for sharing!

[Leave me alone....]

nice write. loved how you changed the colors for each line at the begining.

[Thea]

Really love it! :)))

[nevermindfan1991]

With so much raw emotion, I thought this was very personal poem. And to my surprise it is not. This just how great of a writer you are. Once again, great job!

[Becky C Strukamp]

I do relate to the words. A very nice write and one that I am sure others can identify with. One of the mysteries of life, the hope, dream, want, desires crushed by a meanlingless parasite. Good write.

[Day Dreamer]

This is very easy to relate to. Very well written also. Keep writing! :)

[Darkest Rose]

I love this poem! The end is brilliant and it relates to a lot of girls who have had this happen.Keep up the awesome writing :)

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Alot of girls probably feel this way. But, I guess sometimes when this senerio happens; it's hard to question whether or not they really love you, (in my opinion).
Anyways, Wonderful job~

[Canicus]

I thought this was kind of interesting. nice write