Broken Petal

My take on he loves me he loves me not.

I love it when you call me beautiful,

But I hate it when you say I'm ugly

I love it when you hold my hand,

And hate it when you don't take me around your friends

I love it when you hold me close,

But hate it when you say you need space

I love you

And I hate you

I want to be with you,

But I feel like I'm selling myself short

Love should be a two way street

And if your not with me

I must be better off without you

So I count my petals

One by one

It says I love you not ...

Author's Note

This has nothing to do with me, I just wrote it. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

He loves me, he loves me not. This made me wonder more if the protagonist loved herself enough to cut the tie with someone who treated her so poorly. I'm glad she wises up at the end!

I could be way off base here, (I know you were playing with format here, and being creative,) but by having the last stanza in such small lettering and so compacted, it gives the illusion that her words lack real conviction. I think it would make more impact for her words to get stronger and bolder. Just MHO.

[Muse]

Love/hate relationships, I know this one well. I liked this poem, very honest.

[Raven Starhawk]

I believe these words were at some time on the tongues of most women. You compose truth so vividly and beautifully.

[Anna Marcela<3]

[Call Me Blu]

I really like how you can create emotions that are not connected to you but they still seem that way. This is really good.

[Groovy]

Great Write !

[Linear]

Love is not! A two way street, love never looks for a return,like It's a bargaining chip, but gives freely, forgives easily and suffers quietly... Enjoyed the poem though

[Pramod]

just one word to describe it....AWESOME!

[Alicia Hirshey]

I like this allot, because at this point in time with my relationship i am in this boat. And it seems like no matter how hard I try or what I say that nothing is going to change him. ever. I don't know what to do but I think your poem has given me an idea.

[Inyourshadow]

I agree with the two way street metaphor, love should be all or nothing there is no inbetween or compromise. Beautifully written, love the way it was set out at beginning statement after statement each one truth. Keep em' coming

[Starry Eyed]

Its like theres a good side to it.. then a downside then a goodside then a downside etc... yes Iove this!