Broken Petal

My take on he loves me he loves me not.

I love it when you call me beautiful,

But I hate it when you say I'm ugly

I love it when you hold my hand,

And hate it when you don't take me around your friends

I love it when you hold me close,

But hate it when you say you need space

I love you

And I hate you

I want to be with you,

But I feel like I'm selling myself short

Love should be a two way street

And if your not with me

I must be better off without you

So I count my petals

One by one

It says I love you not ...

Author's Note

This has nothing to do with me, I just wrote it. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

He loves me, he loves me not. This made me wonder more if the protagonist loved herself enough to cut the tie with someone who treated her so poorly. I'm glad she wises up at the end!

I could be way off base here, (I know you were playing with format here, and being creative,) but by having the last stanza in such small lettering and so compacted, it gives the illusion that her words lack real conviction. I think it would make more impact for her words to get stronger and bolder. Just MHO.

[Fire Tulip]

I luv this!

[sugar]

its like that miley cyrus song 7 things, hahah this was exspressed perfectly nice write

[brenda]

nice i can imagine a girl counting petals like i love him i love him not amzing !:) very creative pem :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Make sure your flower has an odd number of petals.

[The fallen of innocence]

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!

[Silent Knight]

very nice.

[Marie Harrison]

Oh this is cute. Those are all good signs that he might not be the one for you.
What a strong poem, great for many to read.

[LadyNaida]

This is good. It's hard to pout in to words how we feel sometimes about love and life. You did a good job at expressing. I get it, totally. Read my poem "Didn't see that coming!"

[NightShade]

Well done! You paint complexities with gracefully determined strokes. No fuss, no muss.