Disconnection

A solider's wife's worse nightmare when getting a phone call.

You use to call me everyday

To tell me you were safe

You asked me about the kids

And I said that they were okay

I asked you how you were

And you said things could be worse

I said I loved you and then hung up,

Everyday I sat by the phone

Waiting for you to call me,

Never expecting the worse

The phone finally rings as I dash to it

Saying hello

I listen carefully as the man explains to me,

He says I'm sorry mam but he got a bullet to the chest saving his friend

Silence entered the phone

All I could hear was the dial tone

I hung up in disbelief

And I disconnected myself

A knock at the door started me

As a man with a flag said to me

I'm sorry for your loss is there anything we can do?

I said yes please help me,

Because I don't know what to do

A sudden pain stricken me

As I think about being disconnected from him

It is the worse feeling ever,

I pull out his good suit

To find a letter in the pocket

That said I love you and we will never disconnect,

A necklace of a phone expresses the love we shared,

Realizing we can never have a disconnection

Author's Note

I hope you like it. Don't ask why I made it slanted I really don't know why. Thanks for the reviews!

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

The author chooses how to build the cohesive tension... for you slanting worked.
I've been there as doors were opened to answer knocks and rings - on both sides. Loss is deeply shocking and harrowing. Deeply horrified and total grief to absolute numbness - quite a gamut to work with AND have to live with. I think you caught the gut feel of being left behind... You never understand it... just do your best to survive it.

Take care,
Chris

[amdc101]

I like the form. This is heart wrenching and thoughtful. Great piece.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Love the structure. You penned this well. An excellent write.

[Thea]

Very deep and excellent poem!!! :)))

[nevermindfan1991]

Amazing, poignant, and powerful. One of the best poems I've read this week. You were able to pick interesting, even controversial topic, and it make beautiful and express the emotion the wife of recently deceased soldier would feel. This was great poem! Great job!

[Sukriti Suki]

The flow is good and the pain can be felt...good work.

[Jibin]

Beautiful, but sad though , i really felt it through the words..
Nice work dear friend...
:)

[donny ingraham]

this poem is sad but all that is written in it seems to happen all the time. Beautifully written

[Geralyn Miller]

Most of all I hated it at the funeral when people I scarcely knew kept telling me I should be proud, he died a hero---I didn't want a hero, I wanted my Love to hold me tight and love away the heart hurt. I cried a million tears into that flag folded three cornered. I slept hugging his pillow until his scent faded from it, then I cried anew.
You wrote a powerful tribute to a beloved. Thank You for the memories.

[GlamGirl]

This is really sad, yet this happens every day. Makes you think of how lucky you are.