Disconnection

A solider's wife's worse nightmare when getting a phone call.

You use to call me everyday

To tell me you were safe

You asked me about the kids

And I said that they were okay

I asked you how you were

And you said things could be worse

I said I loved you and then hung up,

Everyday I sat by the phone

Waiting for you to call me,

Never expecting the worse

The phone finally rings as I dash to it

Saying hello

I listen carefully as the man explains to me,

He says I'm sorry mam but he got a bullet to the chest saving his friend

Silence entered the phone

All I could hear was the dial tone

I hung up in disbelief

And I disconnected myself

A knock at the door started me

As a man with a flag said to me

I'm sorry for your loss is there anything we can do?

I said yes please help me,

Because I don't know what to do

A sudden pain stricken me

As I think about being disconnected from him

It is the worse feeling ever,

I pull out his good suit

To find a letter in the pocket

That said I love you and we will never disconnect,

A necklace of a phone expresses the love we shared,

Realizing we can never have a disconnection

Author's Note

I hope you like it. Don't ask why I made it slanted I really don't know why. Thanks for the reviews!

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

The author chooses how to build the cohesive tension... for you slanting worked.
I've been there as doors were opened to answer knocks and rings - on both sides. Loss is deeply shocking and harrowing. Deeply horrified and total grief to absolute numbness - quite a gamut to work with AND have to live with. I think you caught the gut feel of being left behind... You never understand it... just do your best to survive it.

Take care,
Chris

[Vinod Kumar U K]

very nice lines of original endless love

[prodicallife]

beautifull pieace nvr had to face nethng such but u in ur way made me feel how hard it is to face ol the consiquences..
PRODICAL

[.]

I dated a soldier based in Northern Ireland at the height of the troubles there..it was the most nailbiting time for me..luckily he returned safe..but I could not imagine the pain that this situation would create..poignant in this awful time we live in...

[Lively]

It is a dream of every soldier to give away his life for his country and GIVING AWAY LIFE is a medal to soldier family for they get the highest status of being called Patriot's family...

[Gomer LePoet]

I like this - connections are not broken even when the lines go down, if they are true connections. thanks for sharing.

[Starry Eyed]

Deeply written! I enjoyed this, This is going on my favorites!

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I love this! I have no need to ask why it is slanted...the form is perfect. I don't know if you realized but, the form you used here shows a sense of disconnection...each line after the first in each stanza drifts away from it...it is great! Your word choice is direct and strong...great work! = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[LadyNaida]

By the way, I love the slant write because it makes a statement of what your are conveying in the poem.

[LadyNaida]

Wow this poem is so deep. I saw a video regarding a man that his wife goes to the military and gets killed and the officer come to his house to give him the news and he is shattered. Is deep! I love this, is sad, but a reality that a lot of families are experiencing with love ones that are serving our country.

[Krystal Nicole]

I loved the arrangement!! And the poem was soo sad but sooo sweet. . Great job!