Disconnection

Disconnection

A Poem by Tasha
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A solider's wife's worse nightmare when getting a phone call.

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You use to call me everyday
To tell me you were safe
You asked me about the kids
And I said that they were okay
I asked you how you were
And you said things could be worse
I said I loved you and then hung up,


Everyday I sat by the phone
Waiting for you to call me,
Never expecting the worse

The phone finally rings as I dash to it
Saying hello
I listen carefully as the man explains to me,
He says I'm sorry mam but he got a bullet to the chest saving his friend
Silence entered the phone
All I could hear was the dial tone
I hung up in disbelief
And I disconnected myself

A knock at the door started me
As a man with a flag said to me
I'm sorry for your loss is there anything we can do?
I said yes please help me,
Because I don't know what to do

A sudden pain stricken me
As I think about being disconnected from him
It is the worse feeling ever,

I pull out his good suit
To find a letter in the pocket
That said I love you and we will never disconnect,
A necklace of a phone expresses the love we shared,
Realizing we can never have a disconnection

© 2011 Tasha


Author's Note

 Tasha
I hope you like it. Don't ask why I made it slanted I really don't know why. Thanks for the reviews!

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Ta'Sha,

The author chooses how to build the cohesive tension... for you slanting worked.
I've been there as doors were opened to answer knocks and rings - on both sides. Loss is deeply shocking and harrowing. Deeply horrified and total grief to absolute numbness - quite a gamut to work with AND have to live with. I think you caught the gut feel of being left behind... You never understand it... just do your best to survive it.

Take care,
Chris

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Very emotional, i felt deep pain with this, may you survive it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Tasha

11 Years Ago

Thank you.
I think the slanting added that little bit of extra "ooomph". I think you did a good job getting your point across and I felt the pain in this poem even though I've never lost anyone in this way. So many people know how this feels and my heart goes out to them. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A poem with a sad story. Receiving a flag for a missed child or husband must leave a pain that can't be described. I went to funeral for Soldiers lost to war. Words are useless to family, wife and children. Disconnection of forever leave a wish to hear the people voice one more time. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can defiantly relate. I understand how it feels to count on a phone call that doesn't go as planned.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is rather straight forward, which I honestly do not see in a lot of poems because it seems that the writers think that just because it is a poem you can throw in some big words and descriptions, making it totally verbose. I really enjoyed the simple message you established without having to make a shot in the dark interpretation. Very good work^^


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written. 21 years in the military it is so difficult when it happens but you expressed it very well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This made me cry! So beautifully done but so very sad. The form was perfect for it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my... this is so sad. Made my eyes sting with tears!
This is very sad, but I loved the ending. The thought that the love was returned and the letter with the necklace. Oh it was beautiful. It's made even more sad when we know this is what some people have to go through.
A great write. Thank you so much for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A great format for this wonderful poem. I loved this poem, it had great flow and word use. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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