Wipe Away

Life would be easier if you could wipe away things you don't like.

Wipe away my tear stained face,

The fear in my eyes when I look at you

Wipe away the pain in my heart

So the damage that has been done can subside

Wipe away the confusion in my mind

For ever doubting you

Putting all my insecurities on a windshield

While the wipers wipe them away

Its a thought that isn't needed,

It was just to drive me crazy

And it worked because I just want to take life's struggles

And wipe them away 

From my mind,

Body,

And spirit

♥♥♥

Author's Note

Dreamed about this earlier hope you like it.
Honest reviews please.

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I wish I had a giant winsheild whiper that I put into my ear and hear it wipeing away all the pain and anguish and hurt and hate and all the rest of the feelings and emotions that bring me down... Very well said and a good dream to have, kinda felt as if I was in it in this read...

[PetiteGemini]

This is very well done. It describes every moment and every feeling that a person wants to erase from their body and mind. They want to be happy and not afraid of anything. I really like this one. It is one of my favorites.

[Rachel]

I loved the flow and structure of this poem. The thoughts are wonderful and clear. One thought though, you could maybe find a way to move the words so that they look like windshield wipers or as if they are being swept away. This might add to your effect :) . Great piece!

[Mashairi]

So true, so true. If only forgetting problems were this easy. Well done :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Good to wipe away fear and sadness. Can't allow the mistakes to slow us down. A strong ending to a amazing poem.
Coyote

[NightShade]

To sum it up in one word: OUTSTANDING!

[Krystal Nicole]

Great write!!!! Very well written. Great job

[temoralez]

Thoughts:
Wipe Away, good title and even better how you input these two words into the beginning of your first stanzas. I'm curious as to why the phrase "Wipe away" doesn't start off your last 3 stanzas, but I also thought maybe 3 times the charm is what you were shooting for.

Constructive Criticism:
I would suggest adding periods at the end of sentences, but I also don't think readers will have difficulty figuring out where the sentences ends. In the beginning of the 5th stanza, are you writing "Its" or "It's"?

[prodicallife]

Beautifull just beautifull i wish i could have you with me and just listen to what you write you are so deep so incredible.

Regards
PRODICAL

[VoodooWebs]

Though I think this is good, maybe you could form out a simple pattern in the syllables. Instead of making them fragmented, in one line you could take out a few words, and in another lengthen it to give it a steady rhythm when you read it.