The Edge

I'm on the edge

with you

hanging on by a thread

trying to keep what we had..

I'm slipping..

catch me..

hold me..

I don't want to loose you

we're about to fall

I hate being on the edge

with you

because you let us fall apart

Author's Note

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[kymee]

nice poem. I've been on the edge too and that is quite uncomfortable.Did you both let it fall apart?you were doing all the work in the beginning of the poem. your choice was to get out or get off instead you both let it go. Could be expanded a bit, but necessary, thanks for letting me read your poem and stay off that edge

[Sherwette]

I like it especially the ending. But True love should catch you when you fall and wouldn't push you to the edge :)

[Bianca La Salle]

i like it, nice job

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

So relatable and pleasure to read, excellent:)

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice poem. I really enjoyed it. I liked the ending as well.

[Becky C Strukamp]

I do I do

sweet poem and to the point..nothing else needed...

good message here as well...of a relationship where he let them fall...he let their love die...

Very well penned!!

[~Anita Sandlin~]

This is really good...I have been in this same situation in the past and feeling like this really sucks....Good job expressing yourself.

[stars are far]

yea it is so great
i love it

[P.N.]

I do like it. A plee to save a love slipping away. Well writen..

[a_mystery]

O my God ... !!!!!!! Such an amazing recording of thoughts ..... !!!!!!!!

You have expressed all the emotions in so few words, keeping the poem so easy, yet forced the mind to process all underlying emotions... Its a great work...

"I'm on the edge

with you"

The arrhythmical style gives the poem an unimaginable flow...

You have depicted emotions of love, confusion, sadness, longing, hatred, anger, disappointment and what not beautifully..!!!!!!!!!

Keep going..!! :)