If Love Was A Currency

If love was a currency
you'd always be close to me
I would exchange every
penny I have to
express my love to you,
I wouldn't be frugal with you
I'd learn to save you
and only spend you
when I need you the most
I'd keep you in the bank
of my heart
with deposits  of hugs and kisses

Author's Note

somewhat cute.

Reviews

[Dimples87]

You're right, this is somewhat cute. I'm not trying to be hard on you or anything but your first two lines started off strong but it confused me a little when you said you'd "exchange every penny" -- I know what you mean but I wanted it to stay strong. I expected more. It could use a little more tweaking, though. I liked it, though nonetheless.

[LadyKarissa]

This is very nice. Love is worth everything but the simple truth is that when someone you love dies you never able to move ahead and that person is forever in your mind and heart. It never gets easier like they say it only gets harder as time goes by. Love is eternal in time that is what makes it special. It is the waiting that makes it painful. Lucie

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this positive poem. Love is worth more then money. Love is forever. Money can slip through our hands. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[alternative_be]

Interesting concept!
Do you know the song 'Money can't buy me love'? You have turned around that statement by 180 degrees and created a new original. What if love was a currency indeed. What would happen when love were able to substitute money?
The 'rich' of today would not be that rich anymore, I fear!

This is cute, but I agree with Dimples87. I think it could be longer as well. This is a great piece, you just need to work on it a little. Good luck ^.^

[TheSweet]

I like this. It's a great analogy elaborated on nicely. There are a few poems like 'If love was...' that are really good. This one joins the rest of them. Well done :)

[Muse]

Too cute for ratings this low, 100/100 for cuteness!

[Raven Starhawk]

It is definitely a cute poem that I can read and feel a genuine freshness.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Very cute actually. Nice poem!

[nevermindfan1991]

very cute, and clever. I loved reading this!

[Cherrie]

great title and very cute