Dear Diary~Chapter 3

Chapter 3

Kristen pulled into her driveway and walked into the house that Ryan built for them in the heart of L.A. Just as Kristen walked into the kitchen she heard a noise.

"Boo!" Ryan shouted as he gave her a hug from behind.

"Hey, you know I don't like being scared." She said while turning around to face him and give him a kiss."

"Sorry sweetie, so how was your day?" He said while leading her to the dinner table.

"Well, are planner Mrs. High-Tower was hospitalized this morning and she can't help up plan the rest of our wedding because she will be tested. I hate to dampen your evening sweetheart, how was your day?" Kristen said as she drove her fork into her steak and potatoes.

"It was good, we hired a couple more people, we got some new interns... and guess what?"

"What?" Kristen asked.

"We won a case." Ryan said with a big smile plastered across his face.

"Oh honey congratulations!"

"Thanks" Ryan said, "Look, I'm sorry about what happened with Mrs. High-Tower but what are we going to do now?"

"Well she said she would find us the second best planner in the country, after her of course. We have a meeting with them tomorrow at 3 p.m."

"Okay, I'll meet you there."

"Alright dear."

After dinner, Ryan and Kristen went to their room to watch t.v. and cuddle in each others arms. As soon as Ryan feel asleep Kristen got out her diary and began writing in it.

Dear Diary,

Today was a pretty okay day. I hate that Mrs. High-Tower is in the hospital, it breaks my heart to see someone go through that. She's such a good person. Things will get better for her! She is an amazing woman and inspiration to us all. Ryan's got good things happening with the law firm. Exactly 3 more months until the wedding!!

Sincerely:Pretty okay.

Reviews

[patricia]

I like the chapters feel of diary days, a few lines the next chapter. An interesting read, I enjoyed the way you told this. I didn't feel the last chapter was the last chapter if you know what I mean, I hope there will be more to come. You seemed to be suggesting so with the life support machine hint. Thankyou I will stay tuned.

[Shep]

Great chapter it gives me some ideas what I can do with my new book Troubles. Moving on to the next chapter.

[SuicidePact.]

You have a way of keeping your audience interested with every word. Great job.

[Angel Bluestocking]

Kristen and Ryan are soo sweet! but i keep feeling for Nick, like you were hinting its going to be them. or something like that.
I like the diary entry. hehe~ she's an optimist.

[Cre8tive]

I enjoyed reading this!!! Nice

[Daft Jester]

"Well, are planner Mrs. High-Tower was hospitalized this morning and she can't help up plan the rest of our wedding because she will be tested. I hate to dampen your evening sweetheart, how was your day?" Kristen said as she drove her fork into her steak and potatoes.

In the first sentence, are should be our, showing possesion, and I believe you ment "us" instead of "up" later in the sentence. Other that that it looks good. :)

[bookworm94]

This seems very interesting, can't wait for the next chapter! =)

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

It seems strange to me to include the diary entry at the end. I guess all of the diary-style stories I've read are ones in which the entire story is told in the diary. It seems a little redundant to go through Kristen's day in real life, then read a recap of it in her diary. The conversation between Ryan and Kristen was realistic, though. Just provide more details about the characters to make them pop as individuals and this story will really hook the reader!

[Calypso]

Great chapter. It flowed with out awkwardness.

[Raven Starhawk]

I particularly like this chapter because to me it feels like it goes more into depth about the relationship at hand. Plus I like the aspect of the diary. It gives me first person insight to the character's thoughts and feelings!