Dear Diary~Chapter 1

Chapter 1

Kristen was walking down the street, with a song in her head while going to meet her Wedding Planner Blair High-Tower. Kristen was getting ready to marry the love of her life Ryan. They met their senior year of high school and have been together ever since. Now at 22, they were ready to continue spending the rest of their lives together.

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Nice start, but you need to give more detail. A paragraph is not a chapter, and it's a very ordinary situation so far. Make it suspenseful; if something is going to go wrong later in the story, give us a sense. Also, try to use stronger words--instead of "Kristen was getting ready," say "Kristen was preparing." 'Wedding Planner' does not need to be capitalized, either. This is the first time I have read your prose, so I'm looking forward to reading more!

[Jessica]

I love your writing!

Can I just say that a chapter can be long or short, there is no specific requirement of how long a chapter needs to be.

[Tasha]

Thank you i appreciate that.

[~LoveMeBoldly~]

It's kinda short but I understand what's being said so that's good:) I suggest adding more detail and emotions it would add on to the text and it would also give readers more to go one. As a suggestion I say you add how they met in high school. That would be a good add on. but still good job!

[Tasha]

Wow thank you.

[~LoveMeBoldly~]

of course:)

[Tasha]

I appreciate it, i gave up on this.

[~LoveMeBoldly~]

why? it seemed like it could be really good!

[Tasha]

Writer's block...it has seem to take over

[~LoveMeBoldly~]

aw:( writer's block isn't nice at all;/ oh well give it time and it might come back to you.

[Tasha]

Thanks that means a lot

[Shep]

Ok where is the rest? I need more. Perhaps give me some details. Build me somthing to take my breath way. Poets can be great novelist because the know more what a person feels.

[Angel Bluestocking]

it feels more of an intro than a chapter, considering its just a paragraph. nicely done though, the beginning sparked my interest to continue~! ;)

Interesting start. Give us a bit more. What was the street like? Sunny, raining, cold, hot? How did they meet, is that to come later? Why now at 22? Paint me a picture show me your world. Bring your art to life.

[Grace Catherine C.]

I'm not so sure this is a chapter, but it does make me want to read more.

[Calypso]

You need a lot more details and try to make the chapter longer.

[Larry Dyson]

High-Tower ..hyphenated names need to be capitalized