Look In The Mirror

It really does hurt

She looked in the mirror like she did everyday, but this time she didn't see that beautiful face everyone else saw. She saw bruises and blood all over her body wondering who could do this to an innocent women like herself. "It must have been a robber". She said out loud, scanning the room she overlooked the man sleeping looking around for clues of a thief. She looked in the mirror one last time but stopped herself short from making eye contact, she went to her children's bedroom to make sure they were okay.

She went to her children's bedroom to find them unconscious, she desperately ran over to them to check if they had a pulse. She called 911 and they showed up in a few minutes. When the paramedics got her kids, a police officer asked her
"What happened to you?"
"A robber must have broke in."
The officer didn't believe her story and told her to come with them to the hospital, she followed accordingly. Surprisingly her husband slept through this whole ordeal.

When they got to the hospital she found out her children would be okay, but the trouble wasn't over. A huge man in pajamas ran to her with anger in eyes destined to kill, when he reached her she let out a cry for help and a ton of people came running. Before he could run like a coward a couple of female nurses tackled him to the ground until security came.

As soon as they took him away she burst into tears, a police officer came to her and she poured her heart out to him. She told him about the abuse and the constant fighting... the attempt to kill her and her children... everything. This officer had compassion for the woman, because only a few years ago his mother was in the same situation.

He offered this woman and her children a place to stay in these cold winter months. But before they left he gave her a mirror, and she had young girls look into that mirror and made them  promise that if they feel like they're being mistreated by a man to call her so they can find a way out.

  

Author's Note

Writing prompt about a mirror, I made the mirror a significant component in this piece. Enjoy.

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

This is amazing! I love it! I must say it is depressing for me. It angers me hearing stories in real life and knowing people who actually do go through such agony and suffering. NO One should ever have to go through something like that. It pains me greatly. The people who abuse others will get what they deserve somehow/someday back. Mankind is cruel to its own.. its not something we should be doing. Great write though!

[luke312]

Sometimes the hardest thing one can face is them self. Very nice piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

That is a interesting way to use a mirror. I like the concept of the idea. Making a promise to your self. You create a very strong story. I like the Police officer and his kindness. Thank you for a very good story.
Coyote

[alternative_be]

Sometimes we do need a mirror in order to find out what is happening in our lives. Good use of the mirror feature.
Secondly you are drawing attention to a major social issue.
You could be amazed how many people are living with abuse without anyone noticing or helping. Sometimes someone even puts up with abuse because they have never known otherwise.

[Luis Gabriel]

Its excellent, the only constructive things to work on are minor editing issues such as grammar and unnecessary references like "innocent woman like herself". if left at innocent woman, it would give a bigger impression of what she is doing and that is trying to psychologically distance herself and pretend she's looking at someone else in the mirror, more third person speech and that great writing technique you did will feel more pronounced!

Great Job!

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Another masterpiece of yours.

Amazing story...

[Magic plus the mayhem.]

Powerful pice! thank you for posting it!

[Laura Hegfield]

Wow, really powerful writing Ta'Shandra!

[bookworm94]

This was beautifully written =) Great job!

[Alicia Hirshey]

This was amazing.

[Groovy]

Wonderful vivid write. Nice to read