Web Of Insanity

I sit by the window and wait for you, but you never show up. I gave you a call to see if you're okay, but the operator says your numbers changed, none of them are now the same. What am I suppose to do daddy? You promised you'd come, but you won't even show, to me you're just a coward and a deadbeat dad. You! You manipulated me into thinking you changed, but we all know you haven't. You had my mind spinning images of us actually becoming a family, but those dreams were squashed. You made me think things would get better, but you only made things worse, now I'm left with what I hoped would be, but I now know could never be... in my web of insanity.

Reviews

[Maya Storm]

Know a person for who they really are. Find a work around. When he shows up make room for happiness when he makes the time for you.

Usually letting a person know how, wrong they are or how bad they have been, keeps them in that frame of mind and it's hard to change when it's what they see all the time. Let him know how you feel about the past and about the hurt we you are in a good place, when you can say it with a smile.

We do not have control over the actions of others, but we have control over ourselves. Ta'Shandra control your own happiness :)

[theopenbook]

it's really hard to know how people turn out to be:) you did a really good job of expressing the emotions one feels when the person they love dont turn out the way they expected:)

[Grace Catherine C.]

Intense, well written.

[patricia]

oosh! back to reality and the world as it is, with all its pain and disappointments. Thankyou.

[Moto Kaligawa]

Unclear, so many different directions. Is the child insane? abused? or simply abandoned. The child got what they hoped for, but I thought the daddy was what was hoped for. What is the issue of manipulation? Is this an adult issue, or is this abuse? Almost sounds like alcohol is involved, all the promises in that particular swamp.

[A little tipsy]

Ouch this hit home as my daughters live in another state and I don't get to see them much. Makes me sad and wanting to jump in the truck. Powerful write and well stated. One prays when they have children that all will turn out ok, but sometime they don't and worlds end for both child and parent. God I love my daughters.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is extremely sad but well written. It makes me want to call my daughter right now. Very powerful write. Favorited.

[Short.Nerd]

Wow... that's kinda sad but very good. I loved the words you used. Excellent job!

[pia Z]

Awesome! Let it rip! I love it when poets don't mince their words or muddy their waters to make them appear deeper than they are. You're angry, and you let it fly! Kudos to you!

[Coyote Poetry]

Life can be hard for some people. I was raised in foster homes for 7 years and I didn't know why till I got older. Sometime road blocks are put up and reason can be hidden for separation. My AWOL father taught me to be a good father. I work hard and try to insure my kids have a home to feel safe in. Sometime we must learn from the errors of others to be a good person. A powerful short story. Thank you for sharing.
Coyote

Sometimes a dad thinks his children may be better off without him. Sometimes he just procrastinates things, until he becomes like the song Cat's in the Cradle (it's by Harry Chapin). And sometimes, well sometimes a dad just doesn't want to live up to the title.

Anyway, this story packs a powerful message in such few words. Well done.