Web Of Insanity

I sit by the window and wait for you, but you never show up. I gave you a call to see if you're okay, but the operator says your numbers changed, none of them are now the same. What am I suppose to do daddy? You promised you'd come, but you won't even show, to me you're just a coward and a deadbeat dad. You! You manipulated me into thinking you changed, but we all know you haven't. You had my mind spinning images of us actually becoming a family, but those dreams were squashed. You made me think things would get better, but you only made things worse, now I'm left with what I hoped would be, but I now know could never be... in my web of insanity.

Reviews

[Maya Storm]

Know a person for who they really are. Find a work around. When he shows up make room for happiness when he makes the time for you.

Usually letting a person know how, wrong they are or how bad they have been, keeps them in that frame of mind and it's hard to change when it's what they see all the time. Let him know how you feel about the past and about the hurt we you are in a good place, when you can say it with a smile.

We do not have control over the actions of others, but we have control over ourselves. Ta'Shandra control your own happiness :)

[Warrior]

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Good job once again.

[Joshua J. Certain]

A lot of emotion and deep feelings conveyed. Sad write but also drawing.

[Bertie]

Almost like the letter written but never sent.
The words ring with child like hurt and dissapointment.
Have you read Sylvia Plath's 'Daddy' ?
I'd be interested to see what you made of it....
Well done on a moving piece.

[lostboy]

my dad is my dad that will never change..i still love him.

[Sean Allen]

Beautiful heartfelt story. I wish it was a bit longer and that it had a happy ending.

[TM "Ree" Tate]

I feel the pain and disappointment in this piece, well expressed

[Inyourshadow]

Sometimes life just seems to get in the way, when he finally does appear give him a chance to explain his actions before you dismiss him forever. The poem is powerful and very emotonal showing your need to be heard to be loved, maybe one day things will change and if not don't let the what if's and maybe's keep you imprisioned in the past always strive forward and let your strength be those that do reciprecate your love. Keep em' coming

[Writing with Kae]

this story is very good. Your emotions are very well portrayed. You painted the picture perfectly

[It Broke Me]

As I always say, people don't change. I can relate to being let down by someone. This may have worked better as a poem considering the length isn't that of a story, but it still conveys the emotions well.

[Aidz]

The love of a parent who fails in their duties damages all.. nicely written