Wite-out

Everything that I thought you were...
I white it out,
I white it out from my mind,
I laugh to keep from crying

The bold black lies you told
are erased from my memory
with a streak of wite-out

The constant wondering of where I was
was for you to know where to not go
with somebody else...
I use my wite-out..

I wish I had  listen to my friends
Instead I chose to white them out of the equation,
because it was none of their business
I now see that you are the same player
everyone else said you were...

I've got every type of wite-out
to get rid of you...
the regular, pen, and tape...
so begone you scumbag
because I've whitted you out of my life

Author's Note

I wanted to try something different, I used wite-out as a way to "delete" someone out of their life.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

That is an interesting idea. The white out makes the slate clean and free for new things. It makes a page writable again so new things can be put on it.

While whiteout can take things away on the surface, the things it cover still exits. Like those people still exists. The rolls they played in a persons life remain in memory. The way they shape a person are there as well.

Yet, it is a decent way of moving on. It takes a person out of the past and into the future so they can make new things. That is a good thing in the moment, but in the long run one has to mend what is underneath.

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it

[Kyla H]

Hmm, very interesting way to look at it. You took a common object and gave it such powerful meaning. Nicely done.(:

[Jibin]

A good write dear friend, i love the concept you described here and it is excellent.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

The truth hits us between the eyes sometimes and all we can do is break out the wite-out....excellent!

[EdgeOfDark]

I'd say you did a pretty good job, Ta'Shandra! You really have to watch your spelling (Either 'Be gone' or 'Begone'!) Slow down and think about how you want to put your feelings into words. I am beginning to notice improvement in your poems! That's growth! The Wite-out was a great idea! Well done!

[Krystal Nicole]

Great job!! I love the idea and the message about using white out to delete someone out of your life. Wonderful poem!! 100/100!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love how you use the phrase white out. This is a creative way to erase those memories. Let me know if the white out works.

[Bailey C. Writing]

I like the comparison, it's clever and cute. The pain in this poem sticks out, the emotion is seeping through, I think everyone has tried to white someone or something out from their life or memory, it's a very relate-able poem.
Bravo.

[Kevin Horsley]

As clockwork has mentioned, you cannot delete or erase these memories. All you can do is remember and learn and let time dull the wound.

A well expressed write about the want to erase a person from your life, plenty of alcohol can do that or make sufficient changes in your own perceptions of the reality of it all, but that's a route to be avoided. Best to face up to it and to learn from it.

[Linda]

Love concept xxxx