She Thought it was Love

The title says it all.

She thought she had found Mr. Right,
and everything would be alright,
but she was wrong
then  her world started to fall

She thought she had found the one,
 one different from the rest,
who understood
all that she talked about

She thought she found love
when he said
that she was the only girl for him,
she believed every word,
she hung on to them for dear life
like a fish helplessly hanging
onto a hook

But she was left
sad,
and alone
flip flopping her feelings
with   the one she loves...

She thought she was in love,
but it seemed like she was the only one
in love...

Author's Note

A friend was telling me about her problems about being in love with a guy and he didn't seem to love her back. This feeling sucks, and I gave her some advice and then I wrote this.

Reviews

[Andrew - Moon Fixer]

Okay. this is a good piece, but it needs work. First the Sentences they need to flow. This needs help...
(but she was wrong
then her world started to fall)
Okay try this...
(she was wrong.
Her world fell a part)

Now this part take a look...

( She thought she had found Mr. Right,
and everything would be alright,)
There is nothing wrong here but one thing. It Rhymes. The thing is that the rest does not I was expecting that all of it rhymes, ether all or nothing.
I am a victom of this myself. let's try this
( Mr. Right, she believed she had,
Thinking that God has blessed her.

But she was wrong.
The day fell to night. )
Take a look at this. I look forword to reading this again.

[.......]

such a relatable write. I like this full of emotioins

[Kathryn]

A brilliant way to capture that feeling. I can't say I've been there myself, but I've seen my friends crumble in situations like this. Well done :)

[brenda]

i feel like this so many times also the same thing my friend this is really sweet of you to give this poem to her i love this and i have felt like this

[realmwriter]

I have felt this way myself, Know it all to well. I totally realte to what you wrote here. Well written and well paced, Thank you!

[Rene Velez]

a somber mood flows through this piece, but to love is to let your guard down, it's the respect the action receives that makes true love happen, nice write, I'm digging this one

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice job, as always.

[A Risen Heroine.]

Wow..
I can definietly relate to this one...
I felt this way once..
Nice write, you captured it very well!!

~A Fallen Heroine~