If I Were To Die In Seven Days...

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If I were to die in seven days
would you be by my side?
would you help me get over the fact
that this movie's coming to an end?
could you be my support system,
or would you just sit there...
and let the last week of my life come and go

If I were to die in seven days
could we put aside our differences...
could you be there for me... just this once
because there is no second chance

If I were to die in seven days
would you show me the best week of my life,
because nothing's really been that exciting

If I were to die in seven days
would you finally express your love to me
or would you still keep it a secret?

If I were to die in seven days,
it wouldn't matter what anybody else thought
because we would have each other until the end

Author's Note

In my bible class we are talking about Jesus' death and how he only had one more week to live. This is also for the Prompts and Reviews Week 2, and that was your greatest fear and my greatest fear is someone liking you but they can't tell you. I know it seems kind of choppy at places, but I did my best. Thanks for reviews :)

Reviews

[Joel M Frye]

Beautiful sentiment, and heartfelt subject, Ta'shandra. I believe you could add to the poem's impact by making the whole a series of tercets. Simply done, without a great deal of editing:

If I were to die in seven days,
would you help me get over the fact
that this movie's coming to an end?

Could you be my support system,
or would you just sit there...
and let the last week of my life come and go?

If I were to die in seven days
could you be there for me... just this once
because there is no second chance?

...and continue with the rest of your fine write. Just a suggestion...try reading it aloud both ways, and see if it adds impact to your ears.

Well done, in any event.

[.......]

so very heartfilled, I like this.

[emona]

wow very heart filled

[M.Babu]

Good concept here.

~M.Babu~

[Kiari Sabon]

i like it its good

[Veronica Chandler]

This is a very nicely written piece; your thought process belies your age in years. I see a maturity and careful consideration of an important topic. What would we do if we knew the number of days remaining?

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

A very sweet emotion filled piece. The best thing we can do is live each day as if it were our last. :)

[Niikozilla]

Wow, I love it! Actually, I would ask all those questions too. It really gets you thinking. Awesome job :)

[Krystal Nicole]

Very beautifully written. I loved it!!! Great job and Im adding it to my favorites. . .NOW!

[Kevin Horsley]

A thought provoking poem, are some people worth the effort we put into relationships. Would they truly be there when it mattered.

Good write.