If I Were To Die In Seven Days...

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If I were to die in seven days
would you be by my side?
would you help me get over the fact
that this movie's coming to an end?
could you be my support system,
or would you just sit there...
and let the last week of my life come and go

If I were to die in seven days
could we put aside our differences...
could you be there for me... just this once
because there is no second chance

If I were to die in seven days
would you show me the best week of my life,
because nothing's really been that exciting

If I were to die in seven days
would you finally express your love to me
or would you still keep it a secret?

If I were to die in seven days,
it wouldn't matter what anybody else thought
because we would have each other until the end

Author's Note

In my bible class we are talking about Jesus' death and how he only had one more week to live. This is also for the Prompts and Reviews Week 2, and that was your greatest fear and my greatest fear is someone liking you but they can't tell you. I know it seems kind of choppy at places, but I did my best. Thanks for reviews :)

Reviews

[Joel M Frye]

Beautiful sentiment, and heartfelt subject, Ta'shandra. I believe you could add to the poem's impact by making the whole a series of tercets. Simply done, without a great deal of editing:

If I were to die in seven days,
would you help me get over the fact
that this movie's coming to an end?

Could you be my support system,
or would you just sit there...
and let the last week of my life come and go?

If I were to die in seven days
could you be there for me... just this once
because there is no second chance?

...and continue with the rest of your fine write. Just a suggestion...try reading it aloud both ways, and see if it adds impact to your ears.

Well done, in any event.

[GreenQueen]

Very nice, well written! It made me think a little further about a big issue I'm dealing with at the moment. The 7 day concept really puts it all in perspective doesn't it?

Love it. :)

[TheRavenQueer]

Very interesting idea... If I were to die in seven days, who would make an effort to make my last week on Earth worthwhile? I wonder that sometimes too. Brilliant! Well done!! :) :) :)

[Cynthia]

Well, I never have any bible lesson, so I don't really know the story, buts its hard when you know your death with happen in a several days/weeks, and the last days, what will I do? I love the emotions and background of the story, a very loving one. If I were to die in seven days, I will probably enjoy them, but tears rolling as every day passes by...

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

thought provoking for sure. nice job! great write (:

[Kat24]

hi,
this is really good. Kat24

[Lela]

It is a sweet poem. I think that our biggest regrets are always those unspoken feelings and wants. Life is full of what ifs. Your poem explains it so well.

[Bertie]

Simple and concise, you have once again managed to say a lot in not many words.
Well done :)

[Melissa]

I enjoyed this poem it expresses that you should live life to the fullest and not take love for granted:)

[Aurora Lynn]

Great write! I cannot say that I have thought about this in the past, but now that you've written this you've got me thinking. The piece flowed very well, and I don't think it was very choppy at all. Well done!

~Aurora

[unknown]

It definitely sounds like one of those types of movies where you know how much time ou have. Hopefully, the last few days would be happy and memorable ending on a good note. But I would never want to go through this.