Pia Pan

i tried to blend Peter Pan and Tinkerbell

Happy endings are only a few steps away,
a few steps from  me flying to the one I love...
Pia Pan,
to everyone else she's "different" and "strange"
but to me she's just comfortable in her own skin
she doesn't need make up,
or fad diets,
she loves all her curves...
and of course I do to.....

♥♥♥♥

He's so amazing...
the way he takes care of me when I'm down
a lot of people think he's a "push over"
but to me he cares about everything and everyone
plus he makes me happy

♥♥♥♥

We are made for each other Pia,
I'm like a jet
ready for takeoff
and to land in your heart

♥♥♥♥

Author's Note

i tried to do both Peter Pan's and Tinker-bells perspective at once. did it work? i would be grateful for your thoughts.

Reviews

[Marie Shine]

To me, blending Peter Pan and Tinkerbell's aspect worked very well, in this very nice creative penning, which I so enjoyed reading. It is very well balanced and is a lovely soft, gentle, loving write, so well expressed, with a satin smooth flow. Lovely detail in the poem also, which makes it very appealing. Thank you very much for sharing. Blessings always.......

[Allie :)]

Your toics, and points of views were insanely confusing, and I didn't really get it.
Peter Pan and Miss.Tinkerbell are nothing as you portrayed them in your piece.
It seems like you tried to squash 3 pieces into one, and you didn't do it very well.
It's a nice idea, but you didn't execute as well as a more advanced poet might.
Try again! :D

[TheMizFit]

It worked well but this isn't my favorite out of you changing (or something like that, I couldn't find the right word) classics.

[BlueberryKisses]

I believe it worked pretty well :) its definately original and I love how the hearts are separating each stanza, great job!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very entertaining read! Excellent job!

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I love all of your Disney twist poems...to be honest, though, this one sort of confused me, since it is a blend of Peter Pan and Tinkerbell with "Pia," but it also talks about their relationship from each one's point of view as if they are separate characters. The description of how other people feel about them seemed a little strange to me, too. It's been a long time since I watched the movie, but I can't remember anyone thinking Tinkerbell was strange or that Peter was a push-over. He was usually in charge or doing his own thing, wasn't he? Again, though, years have passed since the last time I saw the movie, so I could be wrong about that. Another cool idea!

Nice try. I like the first two stanzas. you hit the mark there. The third felt a little rushed. Almost like you were combining the two but still floated. IDK

[Kat]

good job

[harley]

yes it totally worked. i get the entire feel of both peters and tinks perspective on their relationship. it is a wonderful work of a classic tale with a new twist that no one has ventured to explore or attempt. amazing write.

[Fabric Pulse]

I have to agree with Marie Shine. =]

[Brad]

i could see how they adore one another...but think they would be...um...physically incompatible