Missed Chances

There once was a chance I didn't take
the chance was to be with you
it seems like I missed out
on everything because I didn't believe...
in you,
myself,
whatever the reason
I'm stuck in a pool of missed chances,
a whirlpool of shattered hopes and dreams
all because I was scared of chances
and the chances I'd have to take with you

Author's Note

This is for the Prompts and Reviews group.

Reviews

[CagedBIRDsings]

"I'm stuck in a pool of missed chances,
a whirlpool of shattered hopes and dreams
all because I was scared of chances
and the chances I'd have to take with you"
Those lines took my breath away :) Great Job! I can really relate to this....

[Becky C Strukamp]

Absolutely Perfect!!!!

[Enjoy]

I enjoyed this. Short & to the point but enough text to bring the idea to fruition.
I like how you focused the lines "in you, myself" to stutter the flow purposefully. The only criticism I can really come up with is the use of "pool" and the next line "whirlpool" in the next line: perhaps there's another word you can use to avoid having "pool" twice in such proximity? Also, I would have liked to see the water theme play a larger part in this.

Good stuff!

[Lourisa]

All the "What ifs" in life, there are so many and if you allow them, they will block the sun. A lovely poem. I like it a lot.

[Sophie Titch]

I love this, about how youve realised that you messed up a bit, it seems that you know know to take every chance youve got, but dont tie yourself up.

keep writing :)

[EMW]

Sadly this is very true. Its hard not to think of tall the chances we coud have missed or gave up. If only we could get past what holds us back. It is even harder when it comes to love and being with someone.

[?]

Very nice, we all have those regrets, or what if's.
Awesome write

[Fabric Pulse]

Reminds me of the song by Taylor Swift, Back To December.

[lifesmith]

it's always the "what ifs" that keep us up at night...rarely what didn't go right. always crab 'em by the throat cos even if it doesn't work out, hey, at least I didn't let it go waste...

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Kinda the reason I always think to take chances and oppurtunities that come your way - they may be good for your life. Great write!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent piece depicting regret