Why?

Why?

A Poem by Tasha

Why must people play each other like a fool?
It certainly is not cool,
It is very cruel
And it turns this match into a duel

Why must people lie?
Is it so a loved one won't cry?

That's not very fair,
I'd rather it tear...
Me a part... most likely

Why must people cheat?
To me it makes them a creep,
That would make me jump in a jeep
And drive away
So I would not have to stay

© 2011 Tasha


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It is a very good try at trying to rhyme however like another reviewer it feels forced at certain points. The third stanza could use a little rewording or find some way to connect it with the second stanza. I think if you come back to it and work at it you can expand the poem and convey a deeper meaning of WHY? But other then that it was a very good try and do not get discouraged. Just keep trying, and the more you practice the more the words will flow and the rhyme won't sound forced.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Love to see that you rhymed the poem. :)
"Why must people play each other like a fool?
It certainly is not cool,
It is very cruel
And it turns this match into a duel"
My favorite lines



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nice! I find that the ideas are very real, and your style very colloquial! =) great read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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