Mouse Trap

I've been stuck in this trap

Time and time again,

Thinkin' things will be different

But they are all ways still the same

Is it me, for believing in you?

And the things you say

I feel like a cute little mouse

Dogging the kill every time

Because my minds says go,

And my heart says stay,

I don't want to be the one

That continues to go for the

"Good Cheese"

I'm tired of this mouse trap,

I just want to roam freely

Reviews

[Allie :)]

*all ways- always
*thinkin'-thinking
*dogging-dodging
The idea is good, but I have a difficult time reading past simple grammatical mistakes and mistypings, so I didn't get very far...sorry :/
And as bitchy as that sounded, I didn't mean to sound bitchy.

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

I could relate. Good write

[NickyGL]

I like this very much. It was clever!

[Sukriti Suki]

nice one!! not running after the cheese but just being free. Enjoyed this.

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Powerful and witty! Love it!

[nishantshah2381]

That continues to go for the

"Good Cheese"

I'm tired of this mouse trap,

I just want to roam freely


good one .............. i liked the humor part of it

[roy mccarthy]

nice write!

[Phibby Venable]

i love the feel of this, very talented writing & an excellent grasp.

[LA Lorena]

There is more to life than just cheddar! Go on and sample it!

[JENY]

thats good....
desire for freedom....is very evident in the lines...
good imagery...

[Lily Mae]

I understand this poem very much. You've penned those emotions very well. Great write:) x