Mouse Trap

I've been stuck in this trap

Time and time again,

Thinkin' things will be different

But they are all ways still the same

Is it me, for believing in you?

And the things you say

I feel like a cute little mouse

Dogging the kill every time

Because my minds says go,

And my heart says stay,

I don't want to be the one

That continues to go for the

"Good Cheese"

I'm tired of this mouse trap,

I just want to roam freely

Reviews

[Allie :)]

*all ways- always
*thinkin'-thinking
*dogging-dodging
The idea is good, but I have a difficult time reading past simple grammatical mistakes and mistypings, so I didn't get very far...sorry :/
And as bitchy as that sounded, I didn't mean to sound bitchy.

[Tate Morgan]

never do the same thing again and again expecting a different result

[Celeste21]

For me this poem spoke of women being stuck in abusive/ detrimental relationships that are extremely hard to rid yourself of. Especially if the feeling of loves resonates throughout your being, despite their harsh treatment. Great analogy.

[Audrey Howitt]

really nice job! Great analogy as well--

[Indigo Ribbon]

quite pretty! Though the wording was cute, there was obviously a emotional meaning to this poem, an it was very clear. Trapped, wanting to be free, yet at the same time refusing to say goodbye, to the one who has hurt you. Very nice :-)

[Solidad]

Very true no one likes a labyrinth of deception. Which though it was and odd analogy it fit. I liked the fact that it was different and not cliched. :)

[WynterPhoenix]

This one is quite whimsical but you could still tell there is a deeper meaning than it just being a cutesy poem about a mouse. "I just want to roam freely." Most inspiring!

[CagedBIRDsings]

Great conparison between A mouse trap and a bad relationship. Loved the poem. I can relate to the poem as well. :)

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

This was great, and it really was an interesting comparison. Fabulous job!!

[compositionc]

Interesting comparison.

[Julie Beth]

this was great i loved this :D