Bite Me

This turned out a lot differently than I thought it would.

Bite me, as if it's your symbol of keeping me close
so I won't ever let go
bite me because you love me
hold me tight
'cause I won't ever release
from this hold you have on me
bite me with all those strong teeth you have
keep me under your lips
and hold on as tight as you can
because I want this bite to last forever...
so just bite me until I go insane!!

Reviews

[WhoIsAmelia?]

I don't know where you meant to go with this one, but I like the crazed vampire place you ended up. Resembles to me a sort of twisted romance where the girl is sort of obsessed and, if I may, slightly delusional (*cough cough bella swan*). Perfect poem for all the vampire lovers out there, and an awesome, freaky write too!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The lady seems smitten with being bitten/ that what I get from what you've written./ For her pleasure I wish her luck/ But I must warn you that vampires suck. lol Bloody well done!

[?]

This is intense!! Very strong intense passion
Oh gosh just bite her, now
lol
Loved this, was wonderfully intense for sure.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

We all need a nibble ; )

[LA Lorena]

Crazy vampire love! Nicely done, it started out sweet and went darker as the poem progressed.

[TamiViolet]

lol.. So you want to be bitten, huh? I'm playing. I sense the raw passion in this one, sort of envision a dominatrix of sort although the piece is about vampire love....or is it? Really? Wild, crazy and fun...fun...fun...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Man....now this is intense!

[Krystal Nicole]

WOW!!! Vampire frenzy much??? Dont feet bad--- I am too. LOL I LOVE IT!!! 100/100 great job!

[Maggie]

It's naughty and nice in the same poem :)

[Sunni Davis]

There's an unexpected, underlining passion racing through your poem. Very nice!