Bite Me

This turned out a lot differently than I thought it would.

Bite me, as if it's your symbol of keeping me close
so I won't ever let go
bite me because you love me
hold me tight
'cause I won't ever release
from this hold you have on me
bite me with all those strong teeth you have
keep me under your lips
and hold on as tight as you can
because I want this bite to last forever...
so just bite me until I go insane!!

Reviews

[WhoIsAmelia?]

I don't know where you meant to go with this one, but I like the crazed vampire place you ended up. Resembles to me a sort of twisted romance where the girl is sort of obsessed and, if I may, slightly delusional (*cough cough bella swan*). Perfect poem for all the vampire lovers out there, and an awesome, freaky write too!

[Aidz]

So many ways to look at this.. kewl write

[roy mccarthy]

cool poem!
i like it!

[E.Gleaves]

this reminds me of the video to Kanye West's video for his song Monster. Or S&M by Rihanna. The last line should be revised though the word crazy doesn't fit with the rest of your word choices. " tight, hold, crazy" see how it doesn't fit?

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Just bite me until I go crazy!

Wow! well written and hot!

[Raymond]

Now you see this is exactly what I was explaining to my wife...but no, scream, scream, scream...LOL....really nice piece, fav line "keep me under your lips"

[Shayla Sayer]

i really and truly enjoyed this poem, as short as it was but you really got your point across! well done!

[Mashairi]

This rocks. Beautiful, sexy, and compelling. A job well done, my friend :)

[Lily Mae]

This could be the True Blood theme :)x Great write...xx

[Matthew Kult]

Sexy. I like the little edge to it.

I like the fact it can be seen in many different lights, offering many different types of readers to enjoy it.

Regards,

Matthew

Love this!!!! Such a wonderful intense write.