Bite Me

This turned out a lot differently than I thought it would.

Bite me, as if it's your symbol of keeping me close
so I won't ever let go
bite me because you love me
hold me tight
'cause I won't ever release
from this hold you have on me
bite me with all those strong teeth you have
keep me under your lips
and hold on as tight as you can
because I want this bite to last forever...
so just bite me until I go insane!!

Reviews

[WhoIsAmelia?]

I don't know where you meant to go with this one, but I like the crazed vampire place you ended up. Resembles to me a sort of twisted romance where the girl is sort of obsessed and, if I may, slightly delusional (*cough cough bella swan*). Perfect poem for all the vampire lovers out there, and an awesome, freaky write too!

[Sarah Morgan]

Very much close to the times now with the big craze on vampires, but this to me doesn't make me think of twilight it does however make me think of 'The Vampire Academy Novels' I'm reading now they have much more lusty, sexual scenes in them. I like the vampire blood lust poetry thing.. it's interesting.

[Jazique]

Wow that was very nice. Very creative in a sense of 'Bite me' and never let go. Well it looks like someone has been using their imagination. It was very entertaing. I had no clue what awaited and when read suprised and gratified. Well done sweet and short. Keep up the magnificent work!

[JustNeedToBeHappy]

Very, what's the word...sensual. Not so sure about the exclamation marks but that might just be me being boring :) Very passionate piece.

[Thea Fuentebella]

this poem feels incomplete. ohwell. it can depict either vampiric or a darkly sensual lover. :)

[Sukriti Suki]

this can be sensual, demanding, taking a stance...just so many views to see this...enjoyable.

[unknown]

Interesting poem :-)

[Rediscovery]

This poem is really unique. It was a nice read. Keep up the good work.

[A.D. Wilson]

I agree with E.Gleaves, the last line doesn't quite fit they style of the poem. You could change it to "so just bite me until I go mad" or you could use "insane" instead of "mad". IDK Overall, I really liked the poem. Very sexy!

[Katannaism]

Very vampirish and it also has this tinge of Celtic-cult thing sense going on. Somehow erotic and dark. A very good piece.