Staircase of Love

At the bottom of the stairs is where we first met,
I inch up to where we started talking
And where things got flirtatious

Slowly I crept to where we exchanged numbers,
Our conversations get longer and longer
I  pull up my dress destined to make it
To the top of the staircase of love
Because of the prince that waits for me

Halfway there... I look up and smile into your big brown eyes
And I stop dead in my tracks
Just to catch a glimpse of you

I start back up again...
half nervous, half excited
Knowing where this staircase ends
And where I want a certain part of my life to begin
On this staircase of love

I finally reach the top
And my hearts flutters
Because I know this is where I'm suppose to be...
With you...
On this staircase of love

Reviews

[E.Gleaves]

I like the metaphor of a staircase to describe a budding relationship. Because you have to take steps in order to reach the goal of being with someone. That was a great metaphor, but the poem isn't finished yet. Walking up a big staircase can be tiring, you should add the trails and tribulations the speaker faces as she takes the steps toward reaching her lover. Just an Idea.

[♥ EmeraldHeart &..]

I loved this so much. I somewhat reminded me of the scenes from Titanic where Jack is at the top waiting for Rose. Anyway, this is very well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with this poem. Using the staircase as the location and each step re-thinking the place you were. I like the positive ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Cynthia]

I love how you use stair case as the relationship as well, its so sweet, step by step, day by day, we build up a relationship! We've to do something if we're ready to love someone, to really to care about someone, thats what brings us to the top of the case! i love it when you describe the feeling ' half nervous, half excited', its confusing being in love :)
Nice Written!
( Thanks for submitting it to the contest ' Poems!', good luck =D)

[nishantshah2381]

awesome write

[Gone]

I loved how you used the staircase to describe how love grows with each phase and the meaning within. Love is a lot of things, but the one thing it isn't is unsure. You're wonderful.

[Jazique]

Nice Symbolism is present as the staircases of love. Well done! Very descriptive using feelings. Excellent with grammar and metaphors of love with staircases of many steps until "I finally reach the top." Bravo.

[CagedBIRDsings]

I loved the way you used the staircase to symbolize a relationship as it grows and develops into something beautiful. Almost like a caterpillar slowing becoming a stunning butterfly. :) Gorgeous

[KAREN]

Beautiful! Heartfelt and great flow!

[Kiri Nells]

I had to edit my review to work, please look again at it...

[Kiri Nells]

I really like this, it's great. I think it would be cool if you structured each stanza to look like the poem as a whole was a staircase.
Like this:
Stanza 1
...... Stanza 2
............Stanza 3
................ Stanza 4
........................Stanza 5
Or the other way, so that stanza five is farthest left and stanza one is farthest right.
Just a thought.