Caving In
A Poem by
Tasha
Really dark for me
Sky's getting darker
Breathing gets short
Walls caving in
What am I to do?
Sitting here
Watching as the sky
Turns black
Black because of
The sins of the world
Caving in
Look what you've done
One little apple
Caused sin for all
Of an eternity
No one talks,
No one moves,
Just look at the world
As its caving in
© 2013 Tasha
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Ah that damn apple still reverberates down the line. It can be hard to watch the storm all around us. But when we turn within our heart shines through & gives way to such a light...
I really enjoyed this piece. strong imagery & emotion. I like also that it left me thinking & empathizing. Rock on!
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Thank you very much.
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well, i could say it was all eve's damned fault, but everyone knows adam was tempted by the booty, not the fruit! i want my baby back baby back rib back!
Posted 11 Years Ago
well, i could say it was all eve's damned fault, but everyone knows adam was tempted by the booty, not the fruit! i want my baby back baby back rib back!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Lol i love you quinn, thats the best review ive ever reccived
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right backatcha babe!
Ah that damn apple still reverberates down the line. It can be hard to watch the storm all around us. But when we turn within our heart shines through & gives way to such a light...
I really enjoyed this piece. strong imagery & emotion. I like also that it left me thinking & empathizing. Rock on!
Posted 11 Years Ago
Ah that damn apple still reverberates down the line. It can be hard to watch the storm all around us. But when we turn within our heart shines through & gives way to such a light...
I really enjoyed this piece. strong imagery & emotion. I like also that it left me thinking & empathizing. Rock on!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you very much.
The forbbiden apple! :o
I like how emphasis the cavubg in
Posted 11 Years Ago
The forbbiden apple! :o
I like how emphasis the cavubg in
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Thank you very much!
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you're welcome
Love it :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
Love it :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Thank you :)
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Haha this is hilarious :)
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lol Do you really? I'm so sorry :3
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I like caving in. It has feeling of depth. I felt, you were sad when you were writing this. Try to be close more to nature. Explore others positivism, get experience from nature. Read more and more, You are 18, I wish you all the best for your entire life. Do your best. Writers are the royals but readers are the leaders.
Posted 11 Years Ago
I like caving in. It has feeling of depth. I felt, you were sad when you were writing this. Try to be close more to nature. Explore others positivism, get experience from nature. Read more and more, You are 18, I wish you all the best for your entire life. Do your best. Writers are the royals but readers are the leaders.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you very much A. It really means a lot and I will look into nature more. Thanks again!
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welcome forever :)
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Aww, thanks forever :)
There are many times it feels as if "the world is caving in" There is turmoil and sadness all around but if you take a deeper look there is light among the bleak vastness of darkness. This poem shows how it can feel as if the walls a closing and there is no way out. Strong emotion revealed in this poem.
Posted 11 Years Ago
There are many times it feels as if "the world is caving in" There is turmoil and sadness all around but if you take a deeper look there is light among the bleak vastness of darkness. This poem shows how it can feel as if the walls a closing and there is no way out. Strong emotion revealed in this poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you very much!
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you are quite welcome
Very dark poetry Tasha done very tastefully... I can sense the poet's helplessness... My compliments.
Posted 11 Years Ago
Very dark poetry Tasha done very tastefully... I can sense the poet's helplessness... My compliments.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much!
Beautiful work. Pithy work. Conveyed the message perfectly. Thank you :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
Beautiful work. Pithy work. Conveyed the message perfectly. Thank you :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you for the review!
Dark, agreed. Due to an apple, unsure. Our nature from the start, in accord with you.
Nice work.
Posted 11 Years Ago
Dark, agreed. Due to an apple, unsure. Our nature from the start, in accord with you.
Nice work.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much Kenneth!
Very deep and powerful message.
Posted 11 Years Ago
Very deep and powerful message.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on January 8, 2013
Last Updated on January 8, 2013
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Tasha NC
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