Thanks I Get

Something that needed to be said.

I stood behind you
When no one else would,
I believed you
When everyone
Said it was true
I gave my all to you
And this is the
Thanks I get?
Surely you will
Pay for it all
When you were
Put to blame
I stood by you,
I never let a
Doubt cross
My mind
How could you
Do this to the
Person that cares
About you most
And this is the
Thanks I get?

Author's Note

No reason for writing this, would love to hear your thoughts.

Reviews

[David the writer]

I think it's needs to be revised. It's awkward how you finish your thoughts in the stanza that started the thought. The flow is a little off, sure, but it still doesn't take from the relatable message. I think we've all been there, and done this. Some have said this, some have thought this, and others have wrote this. This thought, and feeling is something everyone has been through, is going through, or does go through.

[Tasha]

Thank you for such a thought out review. I will revise it, just wanted to get some thoughts first. I seem to write poems with no meaning, thanks again.

[David the writer]

Idk, I've read some and they seemed meaningful to me. But you're welcome for the review :)

[Tasha]

Really?

[David the writer]

Yeah, I have. From what I've seen *and didn't get to review, things seem to pop up at the worst times* it's about breakups and dealing with that stuff which to me is meaningful. I've gone through a break up or two before so I found meanings in them

[Tasha]

Well thank you, that seems to be the only thing I am good at writing about.

[David the writer]

I don't do too well with love, romance, and heartbreaks. I'm Dracula, the blood thirsty vampire some people come to love. Of course I still wrtie on the topics, and have expirence in them

[Tasha]

Aww it will get better, I understand still writing topics.

[David the writer]

It is right now, my girlfreind takes good care of me. I just hope you find a guy that'll take care of you

[Tasha]

That's good. Thanks I hope so too.

[David the writer]

Yeah, love is a treasure but not all make the decision to expirence it which is sad because others do choose to partake in it...but sometimes, everyone's taken but those who chose to miss out on such a grand treasure

[Tasha]

That is so true.

[David the writer]

And it's so sad that not everyone gets a happy ending to go along with on hell of a fairy tale...only some do

[Tasha]

Yes...maybe some do for a reason

[David the writer]

Oh why yes, but we'll never know, or probably won't understand or relate. They're bitter for some reason, or maybe just want more time for other things

[Tasha]

I guess or just scared because something failed in the past.

[David the writer]

Oh yes, my freind Camaron has that reason, but I help him out with it. To be honest, if I didn't have a gf, I would try for the guy

[Tasha]

Really? For Camaron or someone else?o

[David the writer]

Camaron, he's a good freind, and he's got a good heart. Besides he's sunky, volguar, and definetly compatable with me

[Tasha]

Aww he sounds like a sweetheart! Have you ever told him that?

[David the writer]

No, creeps him out enough that I'm bi-sexual. Guy knows how to rubb me though, have to ask him to stopp. I usualy do so with a joke that makes him laugh so hard he can't do anything else BUT laugh

[Tasha]

Ohh wow, he sounds like a nice guy. Why does he rub you?

[David the writer]

Cause he thinks it's funny as hell, which I do too, but I also find it sexy-a-tensing. *new word ftw* BUT I'm taken and that's as close to sex as elemtry kids get

[Tasha]

Ohh, what's ftw? That makes sense; what do you mean as close as elementry school kids get?

[David the writer]

I'm 13 in 6th grade. Elementry kids aren't ready for sex but it's only human nature to lust, so they'll get as close to rubb. AND ftw means for the win

[Tasha]

Ohh I understand now. And yes that's true.

[David the writer]

Oh yeahm but I'm personaly ready for sex. I scare off crowds at a time. If you say things like "Idk, I hear drugs enhance art. So I may try drugs." Or "I don't beleive in god" elementry school kids run like hell

[Tasha]

Yeah I understand. The sad thing is I'm older than you and I'm terrified of havingsex. I tend to scare people off with that.

[David the writer]

People are scared of what they don't understand. And it isn't sad. Sex is just something that verries from person to person. For me, it's a fantasy. For some, it's a job. And to you apparantly it's a horror story, and there's others scared of sex too

[Tasha]

I'm scared of what I don't know which is why I find sex terrifying

[David the writer]

I am only excited by mysterious women, and besides when you have an infinite thirst for wisdom and knowledge

[Tasha]

You really think I do?

[David the writer]

Idk about you, that's for you to decide. The whole rest of my comment wasn't there. Sorry, I can only call what I see, and I haven't seen if you do, or if you don't. But it's nice having one, you tend to be very intellegent and mostly respected

[Tasha]

Well thank you. That's truly nice of you to say.

[David the writer]

Better make good on my word though, it isn't every day Dracula gives a comment of such standards

[Tasha]

Why thank you ever so kindly Dracula *bows* I will make good of your word.

[David the writer]

As I expected *nodds head respectfuly*. You have my trust, with 13 years of expirence, I know who I can or can't trust. You're definetly of the trust worthy type

[Tasha]

Thank you very much, and you are too.

[David the writer]

As is any good person as hard as they are to find these days. So enjoy being a lamb in a herd of horses.

[Tasha]

Yes they are hard to find. I will :)

[David the writer]

Wanna switch to a message thread? This is getting awfuly long, but the convo is startling good too

[Tasha]

Yeah we can :) I didn't realize how long this got. e

[Ahmad Cox]

I like the feeling and the strong emotions in this poem. I think we have all been here at some point in our lives.

[Tasha]

Thanks so much greatly appreciated

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I thought this was a strong piece. Some emotions need to be expressed
as blunt and straight to the point. This is one of the moments where the
honesty behind it all shines through.

[Tasha]

Thank you so very much, I truly appreciate it.

[A. V. Madison]

I think at moments it reads awkwardly, but overall I think it's a really good poem. You just can't criticze something that you relate to so well, ya know? Anyway, really, really great poem Tasha. You did a magnicficent job with this one.

[Tasha]

Yeah I understand that. I appreciate the review.