Mystery Guy

Today's encounter.

Seats reassigned,

I'm now beside you

You look at me

But don't say a word,

Black hair,

Skinny jeans,

Chains attached to

The belt loop 

To me you seem

Pretty unapproachable

But looks can be surprising;

You tap my shoulder 

And ask

"What do you think of this?"

I say its adorable

Who would have thought

It would be a cute little puppy

Needing a place to call home

You tell me you want

To have an animal hospital

I say that's something 

We need in the world;

Back to work

I go

Working on this

Psychology

You tap my shoulder

Once more

Asking my opinion

Of this one

I tell you what I think

And you just look

Into my eyes

I'm stuck on your gaze

I can't even focus

Shaking it off

I work some more

Maybe tomorrow

Won't be such a mystery

Hopefully I'll even

Catch your name 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Oh I just love that feeling when you see someone, and they see you, and it's like...are we flirting? Are we just talking? Are we about to do something? That mystery is what keeps us enthralled. Then...cut to eleven years later when you're sitting across from him thinking 'if he doesn't start chewing with his mouth closed I swear to God I will stab him in the eye...' *laugh* Hang onto the mystery a while longer ;-)

-kimmer

[Tasha]

I will, thank you very much kimmer. I am trying to hold on to the mystery.

[Ahmad Cox]

I love the open and playful nature of this poem. I have had these chance encounters myself that usually turn into really good friendships

[Tasha]

It has for me too, actually true friendships. Thanks again :)

[JC]

i think its true to life and real...thats writing..poetry...

[Tasha]

Thank you very much Jason, I really appreciate it.

[Phillitup]

Sorry for my earlier, tiny, review. I have recently tried to start writing longer and more helpful reviews. So, in following with my goals I will give you my bigger review now. First off, the first line draws me down to the second. This is because I was curious about what reassigning seats has to do with a mystery guy. So second line down, I get a feeling of the relation between the title and the first line. The third and fourth lines really sell the title. Draws the reader in rather well. Second of all, the most intriguing character (I would have to say) is the: "Black hair,
Skinny jeans,
Chains attached to
The belt loop
To me you seem
Pretty unapproachable
But looks can be surprising;"
Dude or your "mystery guy". He is rather curious and I know someone (younger of course) who happens to look just that way. Your setting, in this classroom, was airtight. No loop holes in between the message, motivation, task, or setting. Congratulations on that. I'm kind of curious as to
A) What's he asking your opinion about?
and
B) Why is he asking you and not someone else?
Otherwise, the story is pretty clearly told and unmistakable. I applaud you on your hard work! It paid off! I enjoyed this poem because of it's sense of mystery that was clearly brought to attention starting in the title...

[Tasha]

First of all thank you very much for coming back and doing a second review. Thank you for applauding me.
A) he asked me about the opinion of the dog he was thinking about adopting.
B) I honestly don't know why he asked me...he just started talking to me.

I can't thank you enough for reviewing this again!!

[Phillitup]

Thanks for your answers! :)

[Tasha]

No problem! :)

[Phillitup]

This is very interesting...

[Tasha]

Thank you very much!

[Vee Cole]

I love this it makes me feel good.

[Tasha]

Why thank you very much.

[}Echo{]

That's a great feeling... Great poem. Good luck. :)

[Tasha]

It is a wonderful feeling and thank you very much!! :)

[}Echo{]

:)

[Tasha]

:)

[Bexfinch]

Love that feeling... lol This was nice. I think you could use spme of that description

[Tasha]

Haha thank you!
What's spme?

[Bexfinch]

some
:P

[Tasha]

I'm confused, what does that mean?

[Bexfinch]

you need a lil but more description
thats what i was trying to say. Not in a bad way though!!

[Tasha]

Ohh I got'cha now. I see where you're coming from.

[RachelReaper]

mystery guy sounds hot :) I think you should go for him, he sounds pretty nice an, did I mention HOT?

[Tasha]

Haha yes you did mention it and he is. :) Thanks so much for the review!

[RachelReaper]

ur welcome

[Tasha]

:) he really is hot

[RachelReaper]

haha, then I hope you two work out.

[Tasha]

thank you very much.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is so adorable. I can really feel the surprise and longing of the piece as if you want to see them over and over again to get to know them better. Looks really can be deceiving. Even the greatest people have some things that they hide about themselves, but then he also showed you his true colors. This was a great write though. I really think you should get to know him more. Thanks for sharing.

[Tasha]

I am trying to. He is very surprising. Thank you for the review.