I Do

I do love you 

but you don't

give me the

time of day;

I do care

about you

even though

you don't 

care about me;

I do have feelings

for you

and I only wish

that you did too

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Brenden Bow]

Everything having been made into a poem already, poets are hard-pressed to make their work different, to show their vision is something . . . special. Poets, writers in general, can be identified through their style, their flow, their quirky use of words. Your feelings, like everyone else's, are genuine, your vision is important. But, in all honesty, the materialization of that vision doesn't look much more different than other peoples'.

You need a uniqueness, a flair to your poetry - I guess is what I'm trying to say. You're different so be different. (:

[Tasha]

Thank you for the review. I understand what you're saying, so I will make it different.

[Soul Fire]

Relatable, Very well done

[Tasha]

Thanks Raya.

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome

[Tasha]

:)

[quinfinn]

totally expressive and honest. i lke your font size here, hints of shouting your message to the intended party. wonderful.

[Tasha]

Thanks so much for the review Quinfinn!

[quinfinn]

happy to read your art...

[Tasha]

that's so nice of you to say. Thanks.

[quinfinn]

;)

[Tasha]

:)

[That_Girl]

Simple but honest and relatable. Nice!

[Tasha]

Thanks for the review.

[TheCreativityItself]

I agree with Brenden and Diego,
you want to tell us something, but you keep it simple. We can guess what you really wanted to say.. But that isn't the same. If you keep it this way (like a lot of others do) we quickly read trough it and well.. We should remind this poem.

[Tasha]

Thank you for the review. I understand what you are saying, I appreciate your comments. I need to work on making it different. Thanks again!

[TheCreativityItself]

It is still a very good poem, don't forget that!
Yet you're seventeen and you've got a hole lifetime to improve yourself and between you, me ad the other readers I'm sixteen... I've got a lot to learn as well!

[Tasha]

Wow really, you're sixteen...I can't believe that, and thanks for the complement.

[TheCreativityItself]

You're welcome :)
But it is true ;)

[Sirius King]

simple and sad,,, very relate-able,,,good write

[Tasha]

Thank you so much for the review Serenus!

[Sirius King]

no prob :-)

[Tasha]

:)

[Pax]

Simplistic and heartfelt...very good!

[Tasha]

Thanks Pax for the review!

[Canicus]

I like this, It reads one emotion but I get mixed emotions from this. great write.

[Tasha]

Thanks for the review.

[Tree]

I like your format, your style. The only thing is the content. The challenge to anyone writing poetry is to first acknowlege that everything you will ever write about has already been written; the key then is to give your poetry a slant. Tell the old story in a way nobody ever heard it before. It's hard, I know I haven't mastered it. But you're only seventeen right? You've got good form here, but the overall message could pop, a little more.

[Tasha]

Thank you Diego, yeah I'm only 17. And I get what you're saying, I realized I could have made this a lot different than it is. Thank you so much for the review I really appreciate it.

[Tree]

Keep writing though, because you are on the track.

[Tasha]

Aww thanks!