Take Away

All you do

is take away

you take

my breath away

you don't care

about anyone,

what a jerk you are

what did I do 

to you

for you to

take me away,

take me away

mentally

and emotionally

what did I do

to deserve this? 

Author's Note

First poem I posted in a while. What do you think?

Reviews

[prodicallife]

Hey Tasha,
Well this is a very firm mixture of, two different thoughts that could possibly strike me for now one being, you are complaining in a positive sense that, you love him so much that you can't get off the guy. The other one could possibly be it's opposite. I hope you are getting me. This is a nice write indeed.
Keep up the good work.
regards
Prodical

[Tasha]

Hey Prodical,
I do understand what you are saying. Thanks so much for the review.

[prodicallife]

Hey Tasha,
It's always a pleasure to read so good writers like you.

Regards
Prodicallife

[Tasha]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it. You are so sweet.

[Brett Forsythe]

Lots of emotion in this, I like it

[Tasha]

Thanks Brett

[David Scott]

Nice play on words. Oh how we tear our own hearts out. Keep writing! Nice work.

[Tasha]

Thank you Ambiguity.

[Chris]

Good to see you again Tasha... been awhile

Is a bit abrupt, stumbles a little - but the intent supports the style.

[Tasha]

Good to see you too Chris

I know its rough, I'm still working on it. Thanks for the review.