I'm Sorry Mom (Poem)

Last writing I will be submitting for a while, I figured I should write a tribute to my mother.

I'm sorry mom,

For all the times I went against what was right.

You told me,

"When someone talks, boy, you look them in the eye."

I'm sorry,

You expected something great from my life.

But the drugs quickly dimmed

Who you've always thought was bright.

You saw me,

Go through s**t you could hardly understand.

You screamed out.

Could you see remnants of my old man?

I'm sorry,

The path I chose was not part of the plan.

But you kept up with support,

And always lent a helping hand.

I would starve.

I left home at sixteen, living on my own.

Then I'd call,

"Hey mom, think you could bring me just a loaf?"

She'd show up,

A car-load full of groceries, soap for laundry loads.

Then I'd wonder to myself,

"Why the f**k did I leave home?"

Not much changed,

I can't seem to keep a grip on success.

Addiction beat,

Though I can't say that I'm better than the rest.

I got my girl...

Am I a good dad, come on, let's be honest.

Mom, I need a true answer...

Mom, how can I fix this?

Author's Note

Last writing I will be submitting for a while, I figured I should write a tribute to my mother.

Reviews

[Caitlin Lea]

This is very interesting. The repetition of "I'm sorry." was especially good. It was a small reminder that no matter what we say, it's our actions that are important. The rhymes are all pretty good, adding nice structure to the piece without it being over the top. :-)

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you for the review! I found the rhyming at the end, the last 3 lines, was a risk...

[scripted]

i feel that all moms should feel loved even if you have treated them bad i love my mom and i dont no where id be with out her nice job!!! oh and dont take a break

[Damien Davison]

It won't be a long break, I can't let people forget about me now! lol,thank you!

[mandy]

reminds me of the song, "mama tried"......please keep writing, damien....

[Damien Davison]

Oh I will keep writing, I just want to take a break to take in things! Thank you for reviewing! I always appreciate it.

[Jack Reaper]

beautifully done, but what else is there to expect from you. i hope that your writing returns to us soon.

[Damien Davison]

Heh, thank you Jack. Not all is gold though lol!

[Lina Grey]

gotta love mom, so long as she's good to you, and your's sounds like a wonderful woman and role model. I'm sure she forgives you because she loves you, despite anything you feel the need to apologize for. This is a wonderful tribute to her.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much, she is quite a wonderful person!

[marie]

she sounds amazing a role model as what true mothers should be and are

[Damien Davison]

Thanks for reviewing, she is special.

[Tarry Franck]

Very beautiful tribute and what a wonderful woman she is. Great write!

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much Tarry!

[Tarry Franck]

However, I do hope you are not serious about this being the last writing you will submit for awhile. You will be dearly missed if you are telling the truth. But, hey at least I can go back and catch up with your other writings some day :) Hope you enjoy the much needed time off - but just had to let you know you will be missed {{{HUGS}}}

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you, I really appreciate that! I will be reviewing people mostly everyday still, just gonna wait until I've gotten everyone back in the community, I've gained a lot from this experience, I want to help others feel the same. After I'm satisfied, when I add new writings, I will make sure they are memorable works. Thanks again, really!

[Tarry Franck]

Don't sale yourself short, you do create some memorable works. That's my opinion and I stand behind it with my whole heart. Please don't make us wait long. Please.

[LA Lorena]

A beautiful tribute and a heartfelt apology to your Mother. I'm sure she loved this. Now keep on proving that you mean it, and keep giving her reasons to restore faith and trust in you. At this time, your actions need to speak louder than your words, as beautiful as they may be. Good luck to you!

[Damien Davison]

Heh, trying, life seems to throw s**t left and right. Just gotta stay agile and avoid it... Thank you for the review!

[†Tracey†]

Your work amazes me because you have nothing to prove to the world.. You live it raw and have lived it hard and your strength and truth pours out onto the page. I admire your continuing journey and the fact that with each step there is another portion of healing taking place. Your Mom.. (like us all) ;) have a knowing and I'm sure that even in the darkest of moments she felt your heart. This is a beautiful tribute to not just her and her beauty as a person but for you also...xo

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you Tracey, that means a lot, really. I'm sure she felt my heart too... She said to my girlfriend one time that every time she looked at me she wanted to cry. I hadn't made the right choices since 13 so to see me wasted still at 21, now 22, must have heart her deep. Plus all the s**t I pulled, but those are stories for other poems/writings. Thanks!