'winning and losing
through verses and chorus'
that was my favourite line...this was a short piece but i think these are the true feelings of a writer...good job:):):D.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you very much, indeed they were! I appreciate the reviews!
Heheh, I figured I'd just write it out, had a lack of inspiration then thought about writing. Thanks.. read moreHeheh, I figured I'd just write it out, had a lack of inspiration then thought about writing. Thanks for checking it out!
Very nice write. I wish I could communicate as well as this in this short of a piece.
I just loved this, Nicely done.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I appreciate the review, the way I do it is I kinda just, step back, and view things as a whole... A.. read moreI appreciate the review, the way I do it is I kinda just, step back, and view things as a whole... Anyways, thank you!
Serving suggestion....."My mind's a thesaurus":
Or "My mind: A thesaurus"
One brain is so more powerful in it's ability to choose, create, express emotion and to see the funny side of life and catch a ball at the same time than all the greatest of the artificial intelligences jammed into one cosmic space and wired up.... testing... one ...one two.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hmmm... I agree, it should have the ":" after 'mind', thank you very much for the constructive criti.. read moreHmmm... I agree, it should have the ":" after 'mind', thank you very much for the constructive criticism! Take care!
11 Years Ago
On second thought, although it should have it, I find it creates a pause that is just not supposed t.. read moreOn second thought, although it should have it, I find it creates a pause that is just not supposed to be there! lol
Good little summary of the process of writing. So many words are mixed and matched in the mind until we find the right ones, and language opens up to our use. Great job with this poem, it was a fun little read.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you for checking out my work John, good luck with everything, I'm glad you enjoyed it!