Misdirected Focus (Poem)

Stepping in to the realm of chaos

Energy rampaging

Blinding my sight

Testing myself

All for what they caused

Enemies lighting the fires of fight

Once united

I fled from love

Her touch reminded me I was still weak

I killed

I cleaned

I stuffed the dove

Mounted it high to climb back to my feet

I made the choice to break free from these chains

Constricting and slowing my body's life force

I found my voice and I'm seeking change

Lifting this weight

Finally shifting my course

For those changing themselves for others

Shifting your focus

But not feeling right

Take back your pride and step out from cover

Lifting up hope and your wings to take flight

Author's Note

I let my obsession (of becoming a tough and bad as I could just for the moment I would meet up with some guys again) ruin everything in my life... I accomplished what I sought out and I have the scars and people that shared some of those crazy memories with me to prove it... But was it worth it? No. I lost focus of my family. My new born daughter. Never let what someone else does or says affect you and just be you no matter what. Never fear.

Reviews

[Dayran]

In the barrios of Brazil a person encounters overcrowdedness, makeshift homes, improvised gardens, rooftop parties and a general feeling of lack of sobriety. Someone living there, would work hard to get in deeper.... its easier. To someone returning, he takes each view again, a step at a time. It appears less true, but it is more orderly. Stick to your guns buddy boy! A great write.

[Damien Davison]

Thanks for sharing that and for the review!

[Honey21]

I just loved the last line, it has a very moving message.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you!

[Ana Drake]

Very nice. I love the strong message, I can feel your emotion in every line. I hope you've found yourself back on the path to peace. Great write :)

[Damien Davison]

Only recently have I found it. Just had to age a little and get out of the teens, mature... Thank you for the review!

[Kelsey]

Wow, I'm in awe. The flow of this is just amazing, and I love the story that's being told. Every word fits together so precisely with the rest of the piece, and the whole thing is just beautiful in its own special way. This piece seems to be a deep look into the mind of the writer, making it that much more special - thank you for sharing.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for reading and reviewing! Pretty much just woke up and this is the first thing I read so you've made my day good from the very beginning haha thanks!

[ms. barrie]

very encouraging poem, one i myself can relate to, somewhat, your choice of words is very original and i enjoyed the rhyme and flow of this, these lines stood out to me, and they're my favorite...

Stepping in to the realm of chaos
Energy rampaging
Blinding my sight

Testing myself
All for what they caused
Enemies lighting the fires of fight

great write. thanks for sharing :)

[Damien Davison]

Thank you, I really appreciate the review! Glad you could relate, somewhat :P

[ms. barrie]

i cannot relate to trying to be a bad a*s but i can relate to what you described in at the end of your author's note:

. Never let what someone else does or says affect you and just be you no matter what. Never fear.

words, a person's actions do hurt, not only that they linger, i am too trying to slay their voice i sometimes here in my heart. you welcome, it was my pleasure to read, take care :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I wanted to be a bad a*s too. That's why I joined the Marine Corps when I was 18 years old. Cool poem and back story

[Damien Davison]

I just went to the drugs scene heh... Joined when I was 13 years old. Thanks for the review1